the story had loads of emotion in it. just curious what the large mechas were

This story is creepy as all Hell. It still hurts worse than anything reading that Ruby had her eyes removed before she could even remember seeing anything.

This story reminds me of Claymore a lot. Experiments of Grimm and people to create silver eyed warriors, the amazing strengths and feats of these people to combat an enemy that is a part of them; and of course, the tragic consequence of using their powers too much, becoming the monster they despise.

That hurt to read. That last part where it says Ruby's eyes had been removed sent a spear through my heart.

This gave me chills. Wow. I have always loved Lovecraftian horror (The idea, at least. Lovecraft's works make me laugh every time at the sheer racism present in them.) The concept of our own insignificance in the face of the Universe fascinates me, as does the idea that there are things and entities out there that we cannot comprehend. I recently found a short YouTube video that highlights this concept amazingly, called "White Walls" by Dead Sound. I highly recommend it.

My god. Please write this as a whole story. So much potential and an interesting premise.

Absolutely love it. I'm a big fan of Lovecraft and his works and this fits the tone, mood, and endings well. Sad to Ruby on the bad of end of this deal, but very well done regardless.

The premise is interesting, but why didn't Summer do the same as Ruby?. Frankly, it makes her look really stupid.

Awww
I wanted a story with Ruby conquering the world!

Dark and riveting a excellent salute to H.P. Lovecraft the story is so much like something he would write.

Definitely going to the dark on this one. Looks intriguing. See you next chapter (?).

I really hope that this is something you continue because I bloody love your style, and adding in Lovecraft? It's amazing.

I thought others were exaggerating but they weren’t! This was fucking great. Fantastic even!

THAT. WAS. AMAZING! Is this a one-shot or a story? I'm hooked.

So far I’m enthralled. This is a good start, it reminds me a lot of Claymore. Another series where the warriors that fight monsters become the monsters themselves. The idea of a blind Ruby and how she may fight is also interesting. What I’m not sure of is this Ruby getting into Beacon early or not? If not, then Team RWBY won’t be a thing early on I’m guessing.

Oh my lord what will you do to the other 4.