Ok Idk how old you are, but you kinda got to pace yourself. The story is no good when it all just happens I the spot. She just tells people she got powers and she is suicidal and she dont give a shit about anyone but their kid? Honestly not someone I would want around my own kid. She seems unstable and dangerously dependent on a child she just met.

Also how they just talk, people read for immersion. To feel like they are there with the group. Your story and how fast paced it is and how everyone talks the same doesnt give that. Idk I'm tired so my best recommendation is get a beta.