Just found this story. Hope you keep it up. I like his feral link to his inner wolf. A neat way to do a “super human” without being a knockoff.

Very excited for the next chapter!

Hello there!

You know... lately I'm looking for fanfictions involving Maron. I don't really know why but I'm doing this. That's how I "discovered" your fanfiction.

Now placing a girl like Maron with a guy like Jamcha is surely a... daring move for the different kind of behaviour of the two but the story lokks interesting. I don't commented before ONLY because, seeing the last update before this, I thought that it was stopped or abandoned. Fortunately I was wrong XD.

Now let's talk about the two, their first meet was... nice. Maron is always the cute (and little naive) girl offering advices (and nice views as well) while Jamcha... well, seeing what Tien is still able to do EVEN against Cell, is probably the guy that lost worth in Toriyama-Sensei's eyes. Not that Krillin is sooo good compared to him but whatever.

BUT now I have a VERY IMPORTANT question for you and I hope to see the answer in your next AN. Like I wrote up, I read a lot of stories involving Maron and, usually, she's placed with her iconic swimsuit or a yellow bikini at the sea, in a pool, on the shore or in the ocean but NO ONE wrote a detailed scene with her underwater until now. Her... silhouette suggests that her breath-hold skills are very good and from the anime we all saw how much she likes swimming and snorkeling so the question is: will you be the first one to write a good scene with her underwater?

Maybe she and Jamcha could take a dive with some breathing-mask like the ones that Krillin and Gohan used to search the pearl and... to show him how much she likes him, she COULD decide to... remove the masks and share their lung-reserves. Surely the guy, being suddenly unable to breath, will start to panic and what is better than a gorgeous lady wearing a sexy swimsuit/bikini with two big PECTORAL TANKS to relax XD? I'm only offering some idea here and there. Maybe he could train reaching the bottom and holding his breath as much as he can, Maron will decide to assist him and one time, for some reason, he'll lose air with no hope to reach the surface and Maron will catch the chance to... give-him-air-in-an-alternative-way.

Well, after this avalanche of words, I'll wait for the next chapter and your answer. Bye!

It's great to see you post again on this. And hey, don;t stress yourself. We as writers go through things all the time. Just be patient with yourself and then when you feel you're ready, we'll be here for the next chapter. I'm really loving the story from what we did so far.

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You’ve piqued my curiosity with his fic, and I’m enjoying it so far. I’ve always though Yamcha was treated unfairly by Toriyama once Vegeta came into the picture, just because Bulma had a spare womb and Toriyama needed someone to give birth to Trunks. It’s also true that Bulma treated Yamcha far worse than he did her, so it’s nice to see him get shown some respect.

Having said that, while I’m enjoying this story, I wasn’t a fan of some of the overly descriptive scenes, especially King Cold’s introduction. We already know what Cold looks like, so that huge paragraph you spent describing him could’ve been shortened a fair bit, perhaps to include only the most vital information about his appearance. Doing this not just for him, but other characters too, will make your story flow a lot smoother. Your grammar and use of language is great, but potential story bloating is a separate issue entirely.

Still, it’s not a big deal. It’s just something I though I’d point out. Other than that, this is a great read, with a fantastic premise.

Nice chapter and it was especially nice to see Hasky. Though I honestly have trouble picturing her w/ a British accent, that's mostly because I've only ever seen the sub-version of DB. I have to say though, the idea of Krillin just spending the next 3 years training his Kamehameha wave seems ridiculous, considering his lofty goal of catching up to a Super Saiyan. It just seems like he should've said something more creative than that. I actually have a training suggestion that you could possibly use if you'd like to hear it? It's actually an idea I got from a DBZ story I've been following on DA, and I think it could be really useful for someone like Krillin.

I have to say that Goku & Gohan's dialogue w/ Yamcha pissed me off royally. Goku was VERY unsympathetic, at least initially, and I really don't get why he feels they need Trunks help so much? After all, they're aware of what's coming, so it's not like they'll be caught unawares & unprepared. For him care more about the life of a stranger from the future, than the happiness of a friend who's had his back for nearly a decade now, just seems really wrong on Goku's part. And while Gohan may have been trying to help, his words just seemed insincere, like he was saying them only because he was trying to back up his Dad (which I get), instead of genuinely caring about whether or not Yamcha gets a happily ever after. I mean, he's not even 10 years old yet, what the hell would he know about adult relationships?

But since I know where you're going with the story, I guess I can't let myself get too upset about it. I just really wish you hadn't written Goku to be so unsympathetic about the situation, nevermind him trying to provoke it along by asking Vegeta to take her home. And Bulma's supposed to be some genius, why didn't she think to ask Goku to use his new technique to take her there? I mean she literally just watched Goku show it off to everyone, and then complaining about everyone ignoring her not-so practical solution to the Androids, yet she couldn't even come up with that practical solution to get home?

I love this story

The character work is great as always but I wasn't a fan of Goku and Gohan being the catalyst and telling Yamcha not to get together with Bulma for Trunks but rather would have liked Yamcha to find it in himself to break it off with Bulma instead and Goku in my opinion wouldn't be so interfering but would find it in himself to support Yamcha on finding inner strength and conviction.

Poor Yamcha I kinda feel bad for him. So will he be joining Goku, Gohan and Piccolo for training?

I do like the changes you've made to the story in terms of dialogue that differ from when we type on Discord. Very cool. Looking forward to the next chapter my guy! :)

Good chapter, though I'm a little confused as to how Yamcha was able to hear Trunks and Goku's discussion when no one else (aside from Piccolo) could. I get that you had to do it in order to set up the end to the chapter, but I also think that the part could've waited til a little later in the story to get to that part. Unless you're planning to have Yamcha use it as fuel for his training.

The next chapter can't come soon enough, hoping the next chapter is longer lol.
Really hope your laptop was fixed but covid-19 is probably making it difficult.
Thanks for the update.

So hi just found this story and honestly really liking the premise, however a few things I noticed. First you have the Super Saiyan transformation at a 50x multiplier but Yamcha's transformation is an 800x multiplier which seems a bit outlandish. Second is the saiyan zenkai, the get stronger after getting really beat up. Neither Vegeta nor Gohan got zenkai boosts after being healed by the Senzu beans so I was wondering what your thoughts on that were?

So it had to be done it's good Yamcha had to face the truth early on or else he had to face it later which would devastate him more. Plus now that you will make humans and Piccolo more useful opponents like Cell and Majo
In Buu have to be taken out through teamwork because that's the kind of enemies they are. I also hope Gohan another half saiyan we all love reaches his potential in the Buu saga and not robbed of it and comically not wear his saiyaman outfit trust me if your version of Yamcha sees him in that outfit and that idiotic poses am sure he would not approve of it. Hahahahaha
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