Can you plz update its a good story

Wooooooo! AH NEED MOAR!

Plz continue on with this I would like to see more added on to this.

Aaaand...I'm back. I only have a few problems here. But so far the story is not bad...so far.

First problem is the fact that you use words that are plural when talking about someone. You don't use "women" when talking about someone's one and only mom...unless if the dad has a harem, then no problem. But he doesn't.

Second, is the fact that Joan's sisters (and dad) have NO words describing their appearance. I know that they are possibly side characters that don't matter. BUT a little description on how they look like would be nice.

Third...well its not really THAT big of a problem...but I CRINGE at Joan's nickname. In my tastes, that nickname is just so plain and childlike, to me anyways. I know that its your story, but "Yellow Angel"...is just...I dunno how to describe it. I would accept Golden Angel or even Sun Angel. But eh, I guess its fine, I mean I could just bulldoze through the nickname if necessary.

All in all, this story (and chapter) is not bad, but things change, and I hope it does for the better.

Ay papi you have a lotta work right now bud.

First things first, the grammar is not bad, but not so good either. Try using grammarly to fix that.
There are some "your" that is supposed to be "you're" with Winter calling Jackass (that's what I call him) being one of them.

Lemme explain, "your" is a word that describes someone who is connected to the subject. For example, "This is yours." and "This is your fault!" for "you're"...its basically a shortcut for "you are" which is like describing someone to something or someone that is affiliated to a word, like "You're a champ/You are a champ" and "You're like my Superman/You are like my Superman"

Second are how some words/sentences that make me say oof. Here is one of them.
"I can't believed you did that father Sans is right, Your the one is disgrace of us Schnee"

See that? Lemme fix that for ya.

"I can't believe you did that father, Sans is right, YOU'RE the one who is a disgrace to us Schnees."

Notice that I added a comma right before "Sans is right", you can use a (!) there. Also, the "you're" that is in caps, you can do that OR use bold. Because it adds emphasis on that part.

Now for the third and last one is the fact that you use (?) when it wasn't a question. Its a light problem, but a problem nonetheless. You don't need to add a (?) when there is no question.

Lemme show you what you did.

"You don't have to go Sans?! Father is just an idiot and I'm sure that he'll reconsider?!"

And here is the one I fixed for ya!

"You don't have to go Sans! Father is just an idiot and I'm sure that he'll reconsider!"

You don't need to add a (?) whenever someone is shouting or anything related to it. You can add it if its something like this, "What are you doing?!"

There are also some times when its like this, "What are you doing?"

(?) Is added when there's a question. The (!) can be added WITH the (?) IF the atmosphere is right.

Hope that you improve, I'll be keeping an eye on your works and point out sone stuff every once and a while...if I have time.

Yes please. I think this fanfic can go far. So much so that it excites me to no end xD. I know you can't promise for the future but fir now please keep up the amazing work. If not i got a "bone" to pick with you

interesting story

Author. i have a question. when will you update? cause this story is so interesting i just cant wait for the next chapter!

Sooooooo good! PLEASE make more SOON!

good story hope to see more.

hmm interesting

niice

Not bad. A little bit confusing on some parts like you missed a sentence to let us know where everythin is, but still good. Keep up the good work.

I wonder if Sans will be reminded of his brother when he sees Jaune, a tall awkward goofy lanky guy in armour, who has a dream of being a huntsman/royal guard... who also gets trained by a redhead with a spear. All is missing is his love for puzzles and spaghetti and your golden.

I love Sans.