Continiou this work please

Y la continuación? La historia tiene potencial

aww, a cliffhanger. though I'm interested in the story, keep up the good work!

Hmm... I am really interested to see how Jaune will behave with his friends now. I don't know how many years it has been for him but he must have matured greatly to become a successful king.

I find the story so far really good I can't tell you about any mistakes you might have made but you have a solid story so far and I can't wait to read more.

It’s going pretty well so far. Just remember to plan ahead so you don’t write yourself in to a corner that’s the last thing you want. Also I’m wondering will you make it public that jaune is the king or hold that fact back for a while? There both good options but I think holding it back for a while might help you produce more chapters

This is amazing! This isn't quite what I imagined but I love the older more mature jaune and more serious themes with a dash of comedy, great job spiffy, as always I will wait for your next updates

It's great

Im really loving this!

kinda wish you didnt spoil that he was a king already tho :/

I like it so far

Well, i Like it. If the people on the new continent are so long-lived as the butler, waht is slowing their aging down and would it affect jaune?

Pretty good start.

Badbatch: interesting plot but you might want to change the pov from first person to third person since using first person tends to make it into a self insert story instead of jaune-centric story

Interesting. Love to see how this goes and would love to see Cardin get his just desserts and seeing how this is rated M, i'm sure you'll know what i mean ;)

I like the concept, but I do hope Jaune’s friends aren’t all hateful towards him. Nora, Ruby and Pyrrha are the least likely to hold a grudge, Blake will be able to forgive, Weiss will be difficult, and Ren may be unforgiving due to endangering Nora, but they should all be able to move foreword. I hope Jaune puts the council in its place tho, that would be fun to see.