Me gusta tu historia.

Love it. Update soon.

Nice! Can’t wait for the next chapter!

I Hope that Harry will be seme/top/dom/alpha in this relationship

What a intresting Story im looking forward to see where it goes, so is there a Plot reason to eat the head and heart? I.e Empowering or something? Great chapter Love the way you Delt with James, i Feel sorry for Victoria when she Invertubly piss off Harry. Wonder how in Cannon Jake Attitude would be if he didnt want Bella his Self? Looking forward to next Chapter.

great chapter update soon

Well, how else is a wolf meant to deal with prey? With knives and 'Forks'?

Sorry, I seem to be in a bit of a punny mood lately; anyway, can't wait to see what comes next...oh, and I got your PM and all I can say is: get well soon, my friend.

I hope no one will blame me for having Harry being forced by his inner wolf to eat the vamp's heart. As it is better than him sharing it with Jake in the next chapter. Plus with the planed boost that harry will get I hope that Harry and Jake share Aro's heart after Harry willingly chows down on Alec's heart and Jake on Jane's.

Please update this story is so good and can't wait to s

Ok, constructive criticism!
Pick a person PLEASE! First, second, or third.
I see many times you start a sentence with first person then end in third.

Your version- "As I got ready for His first day"

FIRST PERSON- 'As I got ready for MY first day'

THIRD PERSON- 'As HE got ready for his first day'

The story has potential, just please pick a person and stick to it!

Love it. Update soon.

Hello! I just finished reading the first page of your fiction. In the 2nd to last paragraph, in the last sentence, it reads " I felt as if, in some way it was welcoming HIM home". In a first person fix, shouldn't it have read "welcoming ME home"?

Nice to see another update.

Have to say, a part of me wished you could have written in the full game of baseball, but only because it's my favourite scene in the movie and it's funny to imagine Harry playing along.

I bet he'd see Vampire Baseball as something akin to Quidditch.

great chapter update soon

Continue! This is really, really, really good. I like the twist on the two worlds...the beginning was a bit rough, but it smoothed out by the third chapter.