Es una buena historia y me gusta mucho la idea de que shirou se un heroe de la espada pero me gustaria que la espada jian permitiera en un futuro utlilizar a shirou a unlimited blei word y quisiera que actualice lo mas rapido posible tengo una gran intigra de lo que pasara con ese combate

Some people prefer reading a "crappy" story to a well written one.

I'm sad that you've been harrassed lately. It's a great story, and I'm sad to see it halted because of all the ridiculous reviews.

I've seen stories that were actual shit-this isn't one of them.

I'ts well written, as a coherent plot, and is able to deal very elegantly with the fact that shirou is extremely powerful relative to the early waves without becoming nothing but a power wank fest.

It's got good characterization on top of that.

I know it's not much, but I here by offer you an internet hug.

And thus I come to the end, right on a damn cliff hanger.

It's certainly been a fun read. Shirou is far more interesting than the original sword hero, plus I like how you've setup all the...shenanigans, for lack of a better term, Shirou gets up to with his over-thinking everything, plus dealing with the often bullshit mechanics of this world.

I rather like how you've characterized everyone in this story, but special note goes to Tyr. I honestly feel quite a bit for Azu and Tyr's situation, and the setup to this confrontation really has me thirsting for a bit of karmic justice to ensue soon...

Plus you are really setting up Takt as an asshole even with the relative little on him...

Although I'll frankly admit Takt in the webnovel somehow revolutionizing things with damn cars is beyond stupid. Like, I don't care if he has a full awareness/knowledge of how to make an internal combustion engine, the fact of the matter is he has none of the infrastructure to even make the precursors to them.

I'm kinda expecting everything in Faubley is the result of a reality marble on a country scale that's going to pop at some point. It'd make a heck of a lot more sense than this country somehow having developed modern firearms and combustion engines in less than a decade from what seemed like an at best renaissance level technology.

To be fair, I would have expected Firo to call a group of griffons "delicious".

For what it's worth, by this point in the story I think you're characterizing everyone pretty well. Naofumi's not quite his initial selfish self (granted, with what happened to him it's hardly surprising), but he's far from being the idea heroic image.

Just thought I'd note that I think you're doing a pretty good job in this story thus far after reading through the author's notes and seeing your frustration with some peoples' responses.

I am beginning to see why this story is abandoned. Just like this story, when an animal is too far gone, it must be put down to put it out of its misery.

Tldr: this story is trash and the author realized it and jumped ship.

Neat Story.

Accidentally posted last review early...

Point from Last Review is that Motoyasu cannot accept that he is not a Knight in shining armor saving pure maidens, his beliefs make it where he cannot accept knocking a woman up out of wedlock, or him not noticing one of the women he was "protecting" and who looked up to him being sold into slavery without his notice.

So rather than accepting his faults he denied it so hard that he believes it hence the girl he knocked had to be a cheating harlot, or the girl sold into slavery under his watch must be a random whore he doesn't know trying to get him to break a contract she willingly agreed to.

So basically he denied reality.

Itsuki has another fault, if someone cares to out perform him in his party... He will kick them out under the flimsiest pretence, because of his fragile ego...

Naofumi on the other hand is like a giant hedgehog always curled up, as you slowly earn his trust... He eventually snatches you into his curled up spikey form, as if you are a Teddy Bear he needs to safeguard forever.

Naturally it takes persistence, a lot of earned trust, and helps if those he distrusts try to murder you while you try and be his friend. Which is how the Young Princess managed to be accepted, that and she had the backing of those he trusted.

Bonus trust is earned by having a hard life, having been a mistreated slave, and basically if you have been screwed unjustly by those in power...

At least that is what I have grasped from his actions and what he has shown...

I remember reading that Motoyasu got the little sister of his best friend pregnant, denied that he got her pregnant while portraying her as unfaithful and such... She committed suicide because he had acted like he loved her, got permission from her brother to date her, and then when the consequences came up he denied all responsibility and portrayed her as if she had Myne's personality.

His distraught and betrayed best friend stabbed him to death...after Motoyasu greeted him cheerfully as a friend, and Motoyasu died not knowing why he did it. Because anything that threatens the way he sees himself, he refuses to acknowledge, and he will in fact edit his own memory so he doesn't have to face it.

A girl who joined his party who truly loved him, she was tricked into becoming a sex slave through a magical contract, and when she called to him to save her when she saw him while about to be broken in by her first "client"...

He honestly thought she just looked like the girl, but was just a whore who didn't want to honor her contract

This really is excellent.

...I can’t BELIEVE I only just figured out that Azu is a smol Kiyohime. Her description is EXACTLY like her, two-probed horns, white-scaled dragon-hybrid, and aqua blue hair.

Soo I’m close to depression once more- sigh Hello depression my one true visitor.
Anyway even though you won’t read this comment I would like to thank you for the everything that You have written in this site-
Your one of my favourite writer in this cruel and jumbled mess we call fanfiction.
Once again thanks for this story and existing in general I hope you have a healthy life
Leon lonehart out
I’m in incognito and too lazy to enter my account so call incognito-
Sounds cool but is mostly used to hide despicable things

Story starts going down hill after making the "Sword Hero Demon" act. No wonder this is now discontinued. You should have let the conflict between Melomarc and the Shield Hero run it's course instead of trying to make shit like making the Sword Hero the demon one.
This does not resolve the issue of inherent hate and bias to the Shield hero, you just merely transferred it to the next generation Sword Hero.

If you want an anti hero or scapegoat for the hatred and bias if the people, it should have been Shiro's mercenary identity, not the Sword hero one.

Hey, just want to say since I've had this problem before. If you have bad guest reviews constantly, it's okay to delete them. You don't have to take crap from pricks that are too scared to come out of anonymity. You have a lot of potential as a writer. This story has a lot of potential. Your other stories have a lot of potential.

I hope, whether it's this story or others, you'll be able to find the courage and motivation to keep writing. Regardless of guest pricks or haters galore. Godspeed, Dyslexic Writer.