Sweet ...

I agree with the other reader who implied this was a good first chapter, but it’s really not a standalone. The changes you’ve made should be fully explored.

I like the story, but it should continue. I’m not sure it works as a one shot.

Keep going, please. This has the making of a very good story.

Sounds good so far let's see where you take us from here. Thanks for sharing.

Why did he leave her so quickly?

Ok. So far except for the fainting it's quite similar to the canon. Make it new please

I love it! I hope it does not remain a one-shot!

It's "stared" not "starred"

I enjoyed it. I think he might apologize for reading the letter and in doing so say something about any concern of hers being a concern of his, so as to help her to see that he still loved her.

I know this is a one-shot, but how does this slight alteration affect how Darcy acts next and Elizabeth's perception of the situation?

Nicely done. I like the dealing with guilt and responsibility. Yet still so much unspoken and so much misunderstanding.

Fantastic. Great One-Shot. So glad I came across this for my Daily Fanficfix. Thank you. You are on my Favs!

I liked this re-written scene very much. Pleasure to read! Thank you

Wow! You are gifted!

I love how you take a scene and make it your own. No disrespect intended for original author.

This is a one-shot story could become a full story.