Great fic, I loved it!

UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE

WOW w

I like a lot, please do not delay in updating -

Hey are you ever going to update this fanfiction i mean this fanfiction is a good one and i like for you to udate this so i can see what happen nex or you can just telll us that up give up on this fanfiction inside of getting our hope up thinking that you are going to up this fanfition.

i hope you still continue this story.

this is such an amazing story! u got me hock line n sinker XD i think u have really captured the char, i mean it fels like im reading the manga ;3 n with my fav couples in it..okay i simply adored it*squealing* (there i admited)

i hope u get time to finish this awesome story soon hun but amazing work so far

Chapter 1: Momba

Disclaimer: Nope.

[This doesn't say anything, and neither shows a respect for the author or any inclination to legally protect yourself.]

Shampoo rushed forward with her fist, an annoyed yell coming from her.

[Irritating though he is, he isn't provoking (such a) hostile action.]

I wonder, Shampoo thought

[With neither formatting or punctuation to explicitly indicate the thought.]

was there needed an excuse?

[was there an excuse needed]

and saw Akane's amber colored eyes

[But Akane doesn't have amber eyes...]

Chapter 2: Waltz

That's the last time I ever leave that stupid door open. . . .

[There's neither punctuation nor formatting to clearly indicate that this is a direct thought, though that's what the syntax indicates.]

I don't care."

[This looks really repetitious – Ranma says it just above. I know they're not exactly having an intelligible conversation, but couldn't there either be a little more brevity or clarity?]

toward Shampoo and Ukyo's.

[They don't have the same place, wouldn't it be to just one place?]

Written across the top in quick symbols read: Mousse.

['Symbols' is possibly the least clear way of describing it. If you're referring to the Hanzi (the Chinese writing script, for Japanese it's Kanji), it's written with calligraphy and would probably be stated as 'strokes' – that's how you look them up in a Japanese/Chinese dictionary, as opposed to letters or by pronunciation as that varies depending on positioning and use of the Hanzi/Kanji.]

Chapter 3: Tango

Ranma walked slowly toward the Neko Haten.

[Spelling/spacing: Nekohanten]

and pushed open the door to the Neko Haten.

[Nekohanten]

"Shampoo happy to bring Aerin food!

[Spelling/transliteration: Airen, at least as I've always seen it. I've also seen it transliterated as “aelin” once, but for the sake of consistency I think it's “airen”.]

before cooling down and settling back into her cool demeanor.

[Repetition of 'cool'.]

Chapter 4: Jive

Bringing a lip to his fingers,

[I think that's backwards. The gesture generally brings the finger to one's lips. Think about it: he would look awkward bending around to get his lip to his fingers.]

Flashback

[Tacky.]

I really love this story! Everything's perfect! You're a great writer :)

PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

I like this fic. I agree that there is something appealing about Mousse and Akane teaming up as friends.

their needs to be more mousse akane fanfiction pleasse read this revew

What a fun story! Especially this last chapter! I like seeing Kasumi & Nabiki working together as a team...too too funny! I hope you update soon (although this fic looks to be abandoned).

UPDATE DAMN YOU!

I'm so glad this is still going. This whole story puts a smile on my face, but I'm especially happy to see Kasumi taking a more active role in the chaos. And I was wondering when Ukyou was going to come in. Things are progressing nicely and it's good to see some things remain the same, namely from that last scene (how do the Tendos keep sneaking up on them like that?) Keep it up. Insert McD's slogan here.

(B-D)

hello!

This fict made me laugh so hard... And I loved that kiss at the end, it was lovely. please keep going, it's one of the coolest ficts I've read in a long while.

(oh, and about the contest: Akane and shampoo should win, I'm sick and tired of Ranma and Shampoo thinking they're better at everything...)

FOR GODS SAKE UPDATE! What are you? Dead or something? You have 286 reviwes and you've yet to move! WE'RE ALL WAITING FOR YOU! HURRY UP!