Intriguing, would like to see more until my final opinion

Mmmm a fresh idea: fem Shirou saved by saber. However, this chapter is very short and I feel it lost details.

Good work so far.

ok is interesting but I think it is a little short just wait to see what is the desire of arturia

Not a bad start. A few grammar mistakes, but nothing glaring. I've never been a fan of doing the POV switch thing but that's just me. I'm gonna wait to Judge the story until possibly next chapter. Seeing as I don't know much about the other characters or the plot as of yet. However I don't know how to feel about Salters character as of yet. I feel like she should be a bit more angry at learning how not only can't she save her people, she's tainted by something that would never be able to grant her wish anyway.

Anyway keep on writing and remember to have fun.

seeya