I respect that you won't continue this fic but I'm left wondering, why do you see your writing in this fic as cringy. I've been reading fanfiction for 5 years now and I've seen some truely terrible writing, though I never said anything because anxiety and lack of experience prevents me from critiquing. Your writing is fine the way it is in this fanfic and generally pretty good, but I'm glad that you have improved. Cheers to your continued growth!

I'm loving the fic and your writing is great!

Hey, umm Do you think you’ll revisit the premise of this story ever?

Disappointed after it’s now dead. Was looking forward to the rest but oh well, good luck on your future projects.

Well damn it was cringy but I was looking forward to the double date chapter.

I know you're trying to be authentic with Mario and Luigi's accents and all, but you don't need to put "-a" in almost every word. You could leave it out entirely even and it would be ok. I like the story so far. Could do with a little more spacing, but that's just me, not really a necessity.

Oh no...oH No...OOhHh NOOOOOOOO!

More bitch

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Wow it's been too long since last chapter. I hope you can continue this story.

you should keep luigis new voice as it is it's not going to hurt anything we can just imagine he's talking in Italian accent. Besides it was getting annoying adding a after each word. another thing is probably upgrade the rating if there will be lemons in this story.

I've been wondering, why did King Boo side with Bowser in the first place? Maybe you can explore that a bit?

Maybe just stick with normal dialogue for the mario brothers than having them-a talk-a like-a this. It's distracting the reading for me, but if you don't want to change it for future fanfics.

Do a halloween-themed chapter or something like that, and have booette scare Luigi as his/her revenge. Makes E. Gadd right, but not in the way he thinks.

Great story, can't wait to see the next chapter!