alright I really like this fanfic concept. Always had a thing for the seeing dead people types. But the only thing that was kinda lacking, in my book, was the formatting? It was a little confusing to me. Or it's just me cuz I got kinda confused at times where the story was going and like the setting they were in.
But great story I loved it and the condensed chapters :)

Who's george? Also this is awesome !

there are really just a few one piece oc stories that i enjoy, and right now this one might be my top 1. the way you portrayed rouge as her own person who is indeed to blame for her own actions - *chef's kiss*. i hope you are blessed by the inspiration gods and keep writing, because i sure as hell will be waiting for updates

okay I love your style

I am so late for this party, but man if your prose isn't beautiful! I loved the flow of the chapter; the scene in-betweens that explained the setting never felt like they bogged down the pace. In fact, the set the mood really well. I like how you kept going back to the same ideas and further expanded on how they related to Ace and Lana.

Also, I'd like to say that I think your characterization of the characters have been very consistent and believable thus far! I love how very child-like you write Remi, how tired with everything Lana is, and how Ace is just so on edge on his own, but reverts back to his willful self when with company.

Thank you for writing this! Hope to read the next chapter soon~

Hey, don't ever stop writing. Your creativity is on fire!

amazing! once again knocking my socks right off my feet! i love this! keep up the good work! we’re all cheering for you!

“It’s mine, you moron” is my favorite line in this chapter. I really like the way you’re touching on Ace’s mother - I like that you aren’t just ignoring all the hatred that’s been directed at him. I’m excited to see what happens next!

Omg! This story has so much potential! Can't wait to read more! Keep at it!

This is really good! I started this story because I’m a sucker for Ace, but by the time I finished ready I had become enamoured with your OCs as well. Your prose is beautiful and melds description with dialogue really nicely, and your characters feel like they’re alive.

Wow! I really love what you've done with the chapter. It flows so smoothly and the action scene was so clear. I like how you portrayed your characters here; Ace actually annoyed me with his brand of selfishness, but that's a good thing. He felt real. And Lana's world-weariness was so understandable. And Jet - oh Jet - I love him even more. May he find another stray cat who will love him with all its little heart. It's awesome how, in such few words, you can make me really feel for the side characters. You're really good at catching melancholy in flashbacks.

There were just two scenes that I have comments on, the first was when Ace and Lana first spoke at the patio. Remi and Ace's conversation came off as weird to me, because at first I thought that was also the first time that Remi met Ace, but then the next line was her pointing Lana out to him, like she knew Ace was looking for Lana, and then it went back to Remi seeming like she didn't know Ace.

The second one is the one that starts in "Granted, it wasn't a terrible first impression..." because the POV shifts freely between Lana and Ace. Although there's nothing essentially wrong with it, if I remember correctly, it's the only scene that does that and it stands out because of it.

But overall, I really loved it, and I can't wait for the next chapter~ Thank you for writing this!

This is really good! Thank you for writing this story!

wow klexenia! The rewrite is great! I know it’s really hard to revamp stories once you feel like you’ve hit a dead end and I’m really happy that you decided to come back!

lana returns! remi is adorable! ace is a badass! also i love jet! i love all your ocs but jet, he was so good to lana TT also ace gahhh i love that he sort of has this upperclassman vibe to lana being a world-renowned whitebeard pirate and everything, but at the same time i can't wait for him to start being comfortable/silly/smiley around her :D

your whimsical fairtytale writing is so pretty as always. i can't wait to see what happens next, and if we potentially lana's past 'adventures' on karate island? also, i'm quite interested in what role remi will have!

i'm glad you got that extra push to publish this fic. i defintely think the final draft is so much more fluid, you clearly did a lot of work on the names vs pronouns because it's a lot easier to follow the characters around and track who says what. thank you for writing and sharing it with us! :)

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