Well after reading this in one sitting, i have to to say i really loved this one.
My only complaint is that you ended it without showing if Lucy and Laxus forgive their friends of not.
But other then that i really liked it.

I’d recommend you break up the conversation. It’s a little hard to follow when it’s all in one large paragraph. I did the same thing till someone pointed it out to me

Very good your writing once I started I could not stop

I tried reading this, I really did. LucyxLaxus is a weak spot of mine... but the entire time it felt off. Their friends were too ooc just for the sake of rushing the plot along (I would have LOVED to have seen the drama between Team Natsu and ThunderLaxus isn’t good enough!No, Laxus is TOO good for her!’).

Honestly, it’s as if someone is trying to give me a quick rundown of a plot. Except there’s 20 chapters of this. The cliche “this hurts” was rough too. That’s when I stopped.

I wish the best of luck, I see that others enjoy this, and that’s good enough, really. I simply wanted to give some criticism in the hopes that you can build from here.

Cuteeeeeee omg this was amazing

That was a fitting ending even though I wish it wasn’t the end...

Wow this was really good I loved it so much!

NO NO NO NOOOO NOT THE END PLZZZ A SEQUEL PLZZ I LOVE THIS BOOK

Miyuki! The ending was positively beautiful! And sweet! And just so friggen adorable! As sad as I am that the story ended, I think you left off on a good spot. The story overall was amazing and very well thought out! I’m so proud of you! -cries happy tears-

So sweet.

Please write more

So sad to see it end but also so glad that you finished it. And I suck and ending my stuff too, always feeling awkward about by endings. I can’t wait to read the one shot you have to this!

Please write more

I think that once there in the palace she is gonna be able to ask him but once again someone will interrupt and then laxus is gonna as her and it will go on from there

Gahhhh they are so OP but yay I loove this story please update!