this fanfiction, has unhealthy amounts of oc's and i don't like oc's at all.

Adam (Arceus) Gina (Giratina) Palma (Palkia) Dia (Dialga) change my mind

Really Good. Story so far

Well... Ok you know what I like it. I really do like this story :) Keep it up!

Great story! I hope you update this awesome story soon!

Just ignore St Elmo's Fire. I mean they are just nitpicking at best and being a jerk at worse.

I mean you are using anime but also game characters. Seriously the World tab is pointless and unneeded as no one in Pokemon asked for it.

Capitalization of Pokemon is a paradox due to the words being both, fake, and seen as both common and proper nouns. Bulbapedia had a form several years back in which hundreds of people debated is no wrong way with it so just ignore them.

Also, your summary does tell us the plot, and yes naming your chapters in story... is actually rather nice especially for those who read on mobile.

Oh, and your story can change tense its very common so no worries.

Unlike Elmo's I see that this as a lot of potential and it's amazing how well you made it. Just don't take his or his friend's words about such things with nothing but salt. He does this to everyone.

This belongs in the Anime world. Find your story under “Manage Stories” and select it from the dropdown menu that says “World: Any” in the “Category” section. If you have difficulties, this thread has clearer instructions: fanfiction (d o t) net/topic/11834/165132256/1/World-Tags

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Summaries need to tell us more than just the genre. What’s your plot?

Titling chapters in the story itself looks kinda weird; the dropdown menu should suffice.

You wouldn’t capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn’t capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you’re using it as the pokemon’s name, ie, Ash’s pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it’s a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you’re thinking of capitalizing, like trainer or professor or gym.

[Then a girl came behind has golden hair and red eyes. She wears a shirt with black and red stripes]

The rest of the story is in past tense, so this should be as well.

Nice start

if there is one Pokemon i really like Ash to catch... it's Mew for she is my most favorite Pokemon besides Pikachu and you said not all legendary Pokemon will join but does that mean at least some will join?, i really hope Mew joins... good luck with your story.

your grammar is great
and i like your story