Wait so at the end... he just becomes useless? Lame ending man.

Aaaaaaand I read that first sentence and I’m already pissed. Great.

The more I read about Hell the more irritated I get. At this point I think it’s the terrible name, or maybe just bad character design in general with the whole “evil twin” thing. What I’m saying is I hate this character and everything that surrounds him. This is just my opinion though.

Hell is honestly such a shabby villain, the story is fun to read until these parts. Future readers be warned.

I still dislike the whole “evil twin” thing, kinda just kills the whole thing but oh whale...

Yes! It took me two days to read this whole book and it was amazing!

Forshadowing*ding*, Cliche being Cliche *ding*, poor execution on entering Rwby *ding*, dude a moment ago you just said you would be fine waking up in RWBY *ding*, foreshadowing Being op *ding*, When he was talking to Ozpin he sounded like my friend Riku so...*Reverse ding*. Overall I like it

...ummm, you wrote “Hazel grunts in pain,” in the same sentence as “of course doesn’t cause Hazel any Pain” isn’t that self Contradictory

This is bullshit. You can't watch RWBY in one day if you have a life and not 15 hours of sitting in your own waste.

I know I’m late to the party but, thank you for this amazing story from start to took me awhile to read but it was worth it. You have done what so many people could wish to do and completed it. It was fun while it lasted and I wish you luck on the next ones so see ya!

Cherry should be the fall maiden

Traping an imortal in a dimensional nexus that would let her access far more magic than the two of them combined threw around in their final battle was a horrible idea. Even if she doesn't get out anytime in the span of the Rivers family's existence, it could be a disaster. Mabey you could do a one shot where she regrets everything and gets to die and come back as a better person. Mabey she could be reborn as a hero who goes on a quest to find the relics and save the world from a new threat.

What color did Summers eyes turn?

I still can't believe you made Ruby Rose a pedophile.

Now tell me...

What's a Jesus?