OK so right off the bat, commas and sentence breaks. Please.

great story please update

I have no idea what's going on :D

After reading the end of this chapter I had a random thought; is Zwei still here?

Whoa, what is that pacing at the beginning of the chapter?

Feel like I should let you know that Raven's weapon is called 'Omen' in canon

Please write more

love the story please update soon I would like to read what happens nexts

Ozpin and Jaune are both such bitches. Pardon my French but they can go fuck themselves or maybe fuck each other.

I think this work is fine as it is, people just leave harsh comments to be rude and try to get people to stop writing. I have had my share as well. All I do is ignore them and listen to the small majority that do enjoy my work as seeing their reactions makes it all worth while. Glad to see this updated and cant wait for more

Damn, bomb dropped with jaune.

uuhhhh... I think you should stick to your other fanfic, this Shits gone whack

This.

This is awful

Tai and ozpin are evil twist

So Ozpin is the bad guy?
And Tai has serious problems! I think he needs Professional help XD