So nice. Please write more !

Great story! I've always loved the father-son relationship between Yondu and Peter and you've captured that perfectly. Not to be rude or anything - and I'm only saying this because your writing is already fantastic and I want you to improve - but when a character is speaking, always use quotation marks with punctuation marks inside the quotation marks.

For example:
"I'm Marry Poppins, y'all!" Yondu exclaims as he floated down with the aid of his arrow.

Examples such as this can be seen in most stories on the Fan Fiction site, as well as in any book that follows the Western/European grammatical rules. For me personally, I've learned to write better by reading. I hope this will help you. I look forward to reading more of your stories! Take care. :)

Me encanta tu cuento. La dinamica familiar es preciosa. Me gustó lo que hiciste con las voces. También gracias por escribirlo en inglés.

Awwwe Man rip my heart out why don't you- I'm not crying you're crying! No but seriously I love the dialogue hear, I hate the idea of Peter dying, but we know life ends and this, yeah, this was needed. Great job :) The structure isn't my favorite and got a little lost in what was action and what was dialogue sometimes, but overall the point was reached and I enjoyed this immensely