Singing princess pilots... Makes me think of Robotech/Macross.

Great story the only two things that I was disappointed about were that Vivian didn't join Kira's harem because she's one of my favorite characters and second that Vivian's mother Lamia had so little screen time I was hoping that we would see her more.

Sylvia looked in shock, she expected to be trained like a foot soldier, but not this. Then a thought came, and she asked, "Wait, if I didn't want to live, who would you give this? I mean surely you can't build this in a day."

Ange blinked and rubbed the back of her head sheepishly, "Erm, that I don't really know. Maybe we would have given it to someone else."

Okay now this is funny. HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

Good it looks like Ange and Sylvia have both taken the first steps to restoring their sibling bond.

I agree with your statement regarding Shinn. He actually could have been a really great foil to both Kira and Athrun but like the rest of Destiny he was just a hot mess. I'm actually considering doing another fix fic for Destiny after I finish my Cross Ange story. I'll have to burn down the whole thing though and rewrite it from scratch.

Also, you missed a great opportunity for harem shenanigans during the festa. Like this scene for instance:

Jasmine: Vivian...Mei...is our special prize ready?

Vivian: Yep. Everything's set.

Jasmine: I knew I could count on you two. (goes out on stage). Alright everyone, time for the sports competition of death! But we've got something special this year. In addition to the usual million cash prize the winner will also get a night with our resident heartthrob! (curtain rises to reveal Kira gagged and tied to a chair)

Kira:(spits out gag) Jasmine what the hell!

Jasmine: That's right! One night to do whatever you want with him!

Kira: Don't I get a say in this? (looks out and gulps as he sees the predatory looks on everyone's faces) Help!

Afraid I don't agree with your depiction of Tusk here. I don't mind that he's shipped with Hilda but you're missing the motivation of him to take back up the role of the Knight of Villkiss.

Read a little bit and while I think you have a good idea there are a lot of things that work against this fic. (1) The constant breaking of the fourth wall is really unnecessary. You're telling your readers things they already know. (2) Some of the characters lack depth. It seems as if you have them act how you want them to act instead of how they would. IE-I think Zola would have been a LOT more aggressive in her pursuit of Kira.

Now then if you're interested I'd invite you to check out my own Cross Ange fic: The Knight of Hilda. It's a sort of alternate universe/fix fic/side story addressing what I considered two of the biggest flaws of the cannon series: the deficiency of male characters and the absolutist take on the humnas' persecution of the Norma. Check it our when you get a chance and tell me what you think.

I was hoping that the guys would go with them.

I'm glad that you made Ange nicer here it's making me enjoy this more than the anime. I know that it's already after the fact because this story is already complete but I hope that Ange and here sister Sophia(I think that's what her name was) reconcile their relationship with each other because I was really disappointed that they didn't.

Very Nice

I really wanted to like this. The idea was interesting, and although I haven't seen Cross Ange I wanted to see how it would play out in this story.

...Only for you to screw it up pretty much immediately with a mistake I simply can't overlook; you have more then one character speaking in a paragraph.

I know you claim to be young, but that's just an excuse; I knew not to do that by your age.

Here's way: It breaks the flow of the story. By keeping one characters speech to each paragraph you clearly convey the break between one characters dialogue from another's. This is because the human mind more easily tracks what is happening in a written text when a paragraph only covers what is immediate (like character actions and speech) or relevant.

Yes, you made other mistakes. But that's the big one.

So I will see your next project soon.

Good end

This was a soild story and I definitely liked the Final Chapter including embryo's horrible eternity in Hell the bastard deserved it lol. While the story did indeed have some issues I still enjoyed it especially when you took two things that I don't like them being Gundam SEED Destiny and Cross Ange and made them into something worthwhile so for that you deserve a thumbs up in my book and a congratulations for working this hard! And with that I wish you luck in your endeavors and fantastic job with the story.

Being brutally tortured while watching gay porn of Maito Gai...Good God, now there's a good punishment for that arrogant manipulator right there!

Oh, you know what would sound cool? If you did a sequel that adds Iron-Blooded Orphans into the crossover!

But anyways, this has been a great story!

Aw, you complete the story? I was hoping for had Kira, Ange, and the rest are send back to CE for stop ZAFT and Logos of EAF for continue the war.

Not to mention Capt. Ramius, Mu, and the rest were still in the warzone.

I was hoping for if the Gundam/Para-Mail/Ragn-mail gang along with the DRAGONs will intervene them. *sigh sadden*