Great story.

I am dying! This was adorable!

Dear Black Fuego Rio,

Lad, this was by far one of the fluffiest IzuOcha fics I've had the pleasure to read on this site. For a one-shot that is your first MHA fic it's well written and is easy to follow along with. I cannot wait to read some of your other fics on this site.

Sincerely,
- The Scottish Hippie -

"Inko meeting Deku's friends"'s stories are always so awesome!

This is excellent. I'd honestly love to see a second part with Ochaco's parents.

It took me some time to get everything together for a proper review for your story. On my intial read I actually got bored halfway through and started skimming to the end. I came back to this story the next day, wondering why this happened and forced myself to read it with the goal of finding eventual answers to my question.

Before we get to that, though, let me tell you what I liked in your story: I think you managed to picture the interactions between our two lovebirds rather well. You did implement a number of genuinely cute and heartwarming scenes (e.g. Ochaco cooing over Deku in the All Might onesie; both heroes-in-training imitating All Might; Inko and Ochaco discussing their Quirks). The general dynamic between Inko, Izuku and Ochaco feels natural enough to me. You also wrote some of your dialogue in a way to indulge the reader (especially the short exchanges in the beginning and the end between Izuku and Ochaco).

I found it a bit questionable to introduce Inzuku's father in the way you did, since the only canon things we know about him are that he's working abroad and he has a fire breathing quirk. Him being a hero could, for example, result in Izuku worshipping him instead of All Might, especially in his formative years. It's a minor thing, but something I think you, as an author should be aware of (if you haven't been already, of course :) ). There are always people out there who will notice even the smallest mistakes and tell you about it.

Now on to the things which made me turn away from the story on my intial read and other things you can improve on.

1. Show, don't tell. This is, in my opinion, the biggest problem your story has. It's evident throughout your narrative, dialogue and speech tags. Telling is a problem because it creates a distance and reminds the reader that there is, indeed, an author behind the story, narrating. It also slows down the pacing and stops the action. Most importantly, there is a high risk of losing the reader (me), if the author (you) indulges too much in telling, describing and narrating.

Take the first sets of paragraphs after the initial IzuOcha dialogue, for example. I'm pretty certain you could have shown most of the facts or Ochaco's expectations about Inko through Inko's behaviour when they meet and how Inko interacts with both her son and Ochaco. There are also options for some dialogue between Izuku and Ochaco where they can refer to past events (such as their kiss after the successfull combination move, or Iida's and their other classmates' involvement in getting them to confess). This helps keeping the reader interested in your story. Of course that doesn't mean to completely negate the narrative, as I think it's perfectly fine to implement those in Slice of Life short stories, which are naturally slower paced than multi-chapter fics.
The intial paragraphs didn't make me turn away from the story. I could read through them, albeit with small concern forming in the back of my mind.

You also tell and describe a lot after dialogue and speech tags. You tend to describe the characters feelings and thoughts on top of showing them through dialogue and actions. Try to do less of the first and rely more on the latter. Adverbs and speech tags other than 'said' and 'asked' might convey emotions, but they also distance the reader (reminding him that he's reading a story) and basically take the job good dialogue should do.

Examples in your story:

1.1 '..., but I haven't had a chance to tell them about...us, yet.' Ochako confessed while looking slightly nervous, her normally rosy cheeks even redder than usual.

1.2 'PFF!Hahaha! I get it Deku, calm down.' Ochako laughed loudly, the actions her boyfriend was making amusing her greatly and calming her down significantly.

1.3 '...What do you want to know about her?' Izuku asked after finally calming down from the display of affection, more than happy to talk about his mother to Ochako if the shining of his eyes was any indication to her.

1.4 '...,and they were really happy for me when I...finally developed my Quirk and got into U.A.' Izuku explained, looking slightly nervous at the end when he talked about his Quirk.

1.5 '...That ok with you?' Ochako said seriously, staring at Izuku with a determined look to show how much she meant it.

A side note on speech tags: Dialogue cannot be smiled, laughed, giggled, or sighed. Try it out for yourself and see ;).

That was also the part where I dropped the story on my intial read. While there are other reasons for dropping it (I will come to them shortly), it is important to note how big of an impact this aspect (Show, don't tell) has for any story.

2. Dialogue
I'm continuing with dialogue, because it makes for a nice transition. Sometimes your dialogue (with notably exceptions at the beginning and end of your story) is what author James Scott Bell describes as "Marshmallow Dialogue": it's puffy and it blends together (it's also overly sweet, but that's to be expected here ). This is mostly the case when Ochaco is speaking.
Let's take a look at some of her dialogue in your story:

2.1 'I'm not surprised. Parents have a tendency to know what their kids are thinking without them saying anything. I know my parents are aware of my crush on you, but I haven't had the chance to tell them about...us, yet.'

2.2 '...I know he has a tendency to do stupidly reckless stuff when he's in the moment and how often he gets hurt just for training, but I admire that about him. His sweet and gentle personality is great and he's really cute, too. I really love him, Inko, and I don't plan on leaving his side anytime soon.'

Compare those two passages to the exchange in the beginning. Read them out loud. Which one feels more natural to you? If you reach the same conclusion as I did, these two examples sound unnatural. Imagine Ochaco speaking like that. She would be much more concise, with short and simple sentences. Like a teenage girl. Similar to how you wrote Deku's dialogue and the exchange at the beginning.
Always think about who is talking and how they normally talk. Act the dialogue out and see for yourself if it sounds natural. Try compressing the dialogue, making it as concise as possible. Also try to avoid mundane descriptions and conversation, as they tend to bore the reader. Examples in your story include the description of Izuku and Ochaco boarding the train and doing small talk or the conversation that takes place after they received test messages from their study group.

3. Overuse of 'As, '...as' and '...ing'
This is basically your current style. Contrary to what beginning or amateur writers (such as you and I) think, it doesn't work well in fiction and can even look amateurish (especially participle contructions with -ing at the beginning of a sentence). They also slow the pace and set the reader at a distance. So do yourself and your readers a favour and keep your sentences as short and simple as possible.

4. Technical mistakes: Changes in Tenses and Person, Spelling
All I can say about those mistakes is that I've noticed a good number of them in your story and that it is a problem. You also sometimes use the same word again in the following sentence. That's what a Beta reader is for, though - I won't point them out. This review is long enough as it is :D.

This took longer than I thought, but it's a review befitting your story. I'm grateful for any contribution to the IzuOcha ship and at least for fanfics I can return the favour with those reviews. Most of my feedback requires editing parts of a story or tries to encourage you to try out some new things. In any way, keep writing, because that's the only way to improve. As long as you have fun doing it, it will reflect in your stories. For your IzuOcha fics, I'll be along for the ride :).

God this is beautiful, made my butter eyes cry a little. You're a blessing for this fandom my dude.

Favorited and followed. Bless your existence

Really like it
A bit much blush for my taste (but what else can you expect with these charachters) but the rest i really enjoy
From how close you portrayed the charachters to there manga counterpart to the little funny scenes
All by all a really good and enjoyable fanfic
Also on a side note that ending was really funny and cute love it

Amazingly spot on, in terms of characters, I can't really imagine that situation play out differently. I especially grined at ,,Tapping to get his attention" part. This really showed how close they became and how she cares about him. I'd love to read about them going to meet Uraraka's parents.

I LOVE it! I can't wait to see your next fic!

so cute