All I can say is that this was really amazing. You described the emotions so well! And you made me cry with the last sentence...

Sooho as gay? Hmm, quite surprising since we all know about his fascination with the Queen and his philandering ways with the ladies. Maybe he's a queer? Like, he can fall in love with both girls and boys?

I feel sorry for him here. You were able to quite portray Sooho's emotion very well. The grammar can be improved, but it's not glaring enough for me to be distracted (except for 'sweated'). Overall, this is okay.