Oh wow, a fanfic for Miniature, say it ain't so! I watched it recently as it's an odd obscure favorite of mine and was scouring Google for any discussions or fanworks. I did the same at least 5 years ago, and the Internet is only slightly less barren now than it was then. But I did find this, this time. Thanks stranger.

It's darker than I would have expected (or hoped, haha) for a Miniature fic to be, but I'm intrigued regardless. Your descriptions and writing style are good! The concept you're bringing in here (Ch3) is certainly in tune with the more sci-fi side of Twilight Zone. Charley fell into the Twilight Zone, after all! It's possible that I might be missing references and whatnot as I haven't watched TZ completely. Some scattered notes, which hopefully aren't a mess:
- It's nice you go into the aftermath with Myra. While I'm on the side that Miniature's ending was a happy one, Myra was the most sympathetic character besides Charley yet ended up losing him without even a goodbye.
- Technically it's "Charley Parkes", though that is a weird spelling ;P
- Edgar Breedwell, oho. Nice name. In Ch3 though, it changed to Breedlove...? I liked your introductory description of him a bunch.
- Ch1: waaait, so Alice panics and sobs at the sight of Breedwell/love, and then later meets up with him not long after for casual conversation? Interdasting
- Melissa and the new stakes involved feel rather abruptly introduced (from point of view of someone who just watched Miniature), though I guess that was likely intended.

I suppose things will be getting more unpleasant for poor Charley soon enough D:

This is pretty cool so far. I would love to read more!

I'm confused the villain wants to come over into the real world?

I hope there is more. I'm very interested to see what happens next.