This was great. Now re do it into multiple chapters so it can be awesome. Too much words in one chapter kinda makes the structure and organization weak.

Besides their personalities being off, the concept is really interesting! The little details like Sherwin stuttering and Johnathan trying to be understanding, yet questioning the information he was given, add a nice touch to the story. Made me wish for more information about the werewolves/foxes (like how people deal with them or what determines a person's species when transforming).

This is a good fic, but I wanted to read something about "In a Heartbeat" the only thing they have in common is the names and the pairing. All in all though you did a fantastic job, very interesting.