Really good story, will it continue or it's abandonded?

Please let this story become a harem fic. Jaune just needs to wait until each of the girls are of legal age. Also I would like to see next chapter to have Blake being cornered by the other girls about kissing Jaune while Yang could be teasing her at the same time. Thank you.

this is a bit difficult to read. I thought they hadn't seen Jaune in years, but Ozpin has a sixth sense for his habits. the coffee analogy made no sense, Blake just stood there, not reacting as a stranger revealed her secret, and you sped up both Penny and Winter falling for him so much, it feels forced. just how old is Jaune that he's worked with or for both Ozpin and Ironwood, but survived 5 years without either realizing?

I beta read, and specialize with storyline. if you would like me to stop reviewing I will apologize, but if you like I don't mind continuing. writers are artists that create, or recreate whole worlds, so I'll respect your decision either way

Looking forward to more.

I Want to know the past of Neo and Jaune :)

so we just find out that Blake in the past nearly killed Jaune. and there acting like it's no big deal, for god sake she tried to kill a guy for just doing his job, the least she could do is apologise for cutting him open.

Did you mean to write porn? Or did you mean pork?

well that was interesting better james (winter is here now i guess?) caring glynda humorous moment with jaune faking being knocked out when he was just knocked down a yugioh ver of the card game they played no blake x sun and wiess x neptune which is the best thing i could every ask for one of the few bad part about old canon (along with the virus being turned into having absolute control of everything total bs in season 3 i think?) them planning to be vigilantes a nice talk with blake and jaune and details of jaune past when he was "killed" (also hoping one day this jaune gets those other sword and more elements you know more then just wind)

haha a fat zac but what does bones of porn even mean? i guess zac ff could stand for zac fatty fat phat boi (im not trying to be being mean trying to joke the original one i though was fat fuck but thats to crude sounding im just making jokes off your joke) all bad joke aside sorry you havent been into it i hope you feel better? i guess

Good to see you back in action mate

Glad you’re back in action. Can’t wait to read more.

The writing is a bit stiff. The formatting of the sentences and paragraphs is good, but I think you need a native english speaker to recommend some dialogue changes. I would say use more contractions and make the sentences simpler and more to the point. I do like the premise, and I hope you make a good story.

Much better than the other chapters I can see some improvement in your writing

Ok we got more info but the Cringe only increased in level massively

Its hard to make out what's happening in this we need more background info so we understand the changes you have made to the universe

so jaune now owe glynda a good time basically be it a date or a long hard intense stress relief session to turn her into a puddle of goo sauce and limp noodles
jaune saved tuscan just how rich is jaune
best day every speech and food fight happened
different sun bit more mature because of jaune awesomeness huh im hoping your definitely not going to have neptune flirt with wiess and success weiss like every other girl is jaunes id cry tears of anguish if that terrible pairing happens i cried tears of joy when sun x blake was officially off the table lets hope i can do the same with neptune x weiss two of the worse ships along with gylnda james or glynda ozpin or glynda qrow and winter qrow or winter james basically any girl not with jaune is a bad pairing haha well ren x nora an ok side background pairing
did he just pin them to walls with breadsticks and wind thats so badass and he isnt even in his final form nor trying yet (hoping last part more or less confirmed jaune will get those other elemental swords)
and things with the criminals and plans that need to be stopped come on roman and neo be smart go to jaune confess get cinder ruined save the day