This was an entertaining story at some points. There is a lot of dialogue between the main characters. It really goes into a lot of detail about how they're feeling, especially Kara.

Haha. Kara needs to take a chill pill. She has too many dirty thoughts...during work hours (which is worse).

I'm sorry but you really need to acknowledge Kara issues and how she really isn't talking to Lena and you basically just written Lena's character to take what she gets without telling how she feels about it. Its completely unfair how Kara was and still is treating Lena without a proper explanation. This is an unhealthy relationship and that needs to be brought up. That what needs to be worked on for this story otherwise you're doing well.

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love it

Kara Lena moment are very pleasant description not the rate M part even though it's more enjoyable #Lol thank you for making this GBU

Will you continue this story? Please continue...

I'm glad Lena told Alex off. It annoys me the amount she tries to control Karas life.

I gotta say, I love this story. I'm a total sucker for slowburn. the slower, the better, though it's a bit too back and forth for my liking. However the angsty aproach is awesome and very reasonable. It always bothered me a bit that Kara was such a ray of sunshine with all the shit that's happened to her.

I love all of the emotional connections between characters, the segment between Lena and Cat in this chapter alone is perfect. it is also the first story I've ever read that touches on Kara's long lasting trauma. Watching everyone she ever loved die, and then being abandoned by Clark, who is a selfish dick, and then having Astra die in her arms... it's a miracle Kara is still functioning. Superman is one of my all time favorite characters, so it's a testament to your writing that I feel like I hate him while reading about Kara's suffering.
It's also great to read stories by one of the best OUAT authors in another fandom. Supergirl is a fun twist, from magic to syfy. I hope there will eventually be more, but honestly that last sentence did almost feel like a natural end

great story

I hope you come back to this someday! I love it! And that you validate Kara’s feelings- seriously there must be some level of depression there

I’d love for you to continue this story. How can we all the fans convince you?

Very good start! I loved the way you are portraying their relationship from what would be the end of it but you still can see the love and pain. I feel like you are giving Kara more depth, that I feel she sometimes lacks in the series and Lena feels more vulnerable. Now on to the next chapter.

10/10 love this to absolute bits! the writing is absolutely breathtaking and the plot beautifully crafted and executed! please keep it going!