Reviews for A New Persona Adventure |
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Zero kami no mu chapter 2 . 7/29/2017 It sounded smoother when you were writing in third persona. this story is a good read but keeping it in a third person view seems smoother. |
sara chapter 1 . 4/22/2017 good evenning, i just stop by to say that i like your story so please... |
Golden-Black Dragon chapter 1 . 4/18/2017 I've noticed grammatical errors. For example... "We're heading to the exit, give us an extraction point!" could have worked better instead of the original sentence. I think the first chapter seemed a bit rushed. Also, "Yubel" doesn't sound like a normal name, particularly given the setting. |