Confess! Confess!

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Asdfghjkl Omg, the end of this chapter was so ducking cute, I can't even! *squirms* Fangirling and shiping so hard right now! Can't wait to read the next chapter! Here's to hoping that Jakob gets a little jealous of Silas X3

Temper temper Jakob! Hehe

This was a sweet little chapter. I wish it could have been a little longer, but sometimes you have to release shorter chapters.

There are a few words that are missing letters in this chapter. For example I think you intended to have Corrin slap her palm in between her eyes, but you put "he" which confused me for a split second.

Other than that I didn't really see any problems. I think the story is still going quite nicely!

I hope to see more at some point, but it's fine if it takes a while.

Another awesome chapter! I enjoyed seeing how you wrote the dream sequence. It was very interesting!

I noticed a few spelling errors. At one point you said "the archer name Takumi". I believe you meant "named Takumi". You also called Flora "Flor" at one point. This is easily fixable and isn't anything that ruins the story.

It's also a very interesting note you made about Jakob and Felicia never being Corrin's opponent in Fates. I find that to be an interesting observation!

There isn't too much to comment on in this chapter, but I am still very happy with it! I hope to see more chapters in the future!

Gotta agree with you there. I love the northern fortress family! Team book club forever! Thank you for the update, can’t wait for what’s to come!

Another really, really, really great chapter! The story's still strong and it's easily readable!

There is only one error I noticed this chapter. Whenever Jakob was talking about how he'd figure out a way to leave the fortress to get Corrin a healing staff if she needed it. It says (keep in mind I'm cutting out most of the line) "but if it met reassuring your safety".

It probably should have been the word "meant", but it's not an unacceptable mistake. Easily fixable.

I hope to see more of the story!

YESSSS I LOVED THIS CHAPTER! And so it begins! Love the story!

This is a really, really, really good chapter! I haven't noticed any particular errors in terms of canon except for one thing that you may be addressing later.

I find it odd that Corrin still remembers Silas. She was supposed to have forgotten him and yet she still remembers him. That's not to say you don't have plans for it or that you haven't considered it, but it's the only thing I can think of that's off in terms of canon.

Anyway... I'm really loving the story so far and I didn't notice a single spelling or grammar error!

The love! I can feel the love! Let it bloom into a lovely relationship! Can't wait for more!

Sorry for the non-logged review but if you wanna message me as Allyraine feel free to. The slow burn is kinda the best part! I wouldn't worry too much about canon errors because Fates is just... a cluster when it comes to what happens when and so forth. That whole storyline is so crazy that I don't think it matters too too much if you mistime or forget some stuff. So far, great job and love what you're doing with it. Thanks for writing.

Persona 5 for the win! Good chapter.

I love the story so far. Slow build, I like it!

I should try making a drawing of Jakob for his birthday...

Anyway, I really liked this chapter! Pulling a surprise party for our favorite butler. :D Plus, getting to see a bit more of his time with his biological family (as terrible as it may be).

I liked your thought of him appreciating his 'metaphorical' birth rather than his physical one. I honestly think that's something he would believe.

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I hope you're doing well! Can't wait for the next part of the story. :D

Aw, this was cute. Corrin saving the little dragon. :3