Reviews for Hogwarts Online SYOC
Lunastar of moonclan chapter 1 . 3/10/2018
Name: Theron Faeles
Age and birthday: 20, August 20
Year: same as Chavonne
House: Slythrindor
Appearance:5'5"and has natural silver hair that is long and puffy to cover his cat ears. Always wears robes to cover his cat tail. both are natural. always wears a glamour to hide the tail and ears. Chavonne can see through it naturally though. also has natural flawless skin. blue left eye, green right, also natural.
Blood status: pureblood that came into creature inheritance early
Sexuality: bi
Family: Orphan with a lot of money left by parents but can't access until hogwarts
Friends: none
Personality: books are his best friend. he is a loner because of being different. loves to play pranks and see people laugh. he is cunning when it comes to bravery. he tries to think ahead.
History: mother died in giving birth to him and his father couldn't handle taking care of him so he placed Theron in an orphanage. he runs away at the age of ten to become a delivery boy. by the time the game sao comes out, he had saved enough money to buy it. 1 of ten thousand copies and he got one. was always pushing and grinding to clear the game. when he heard of this one he had a feeling it would be the same.
Quidditch: hates it. skips going to the school games.
Clothes outside of class: wears a black fedora. tends to cross-dress. when going around as female she is called Artemis. female outfit looks a bit like johnny depp mad hatter except the fedora replaces the top hat. male outfit makes him look like a Cheshire cat.
Formal attire: silver jacket, silver pants, white bow tie, deep green long sleeve button up and black shoes.
Accessories: right ear has a gold loop earring.
Likes: reading, writing, warm sunny days and curling up by a fire on cold days.
Dislikes: snobbish rich brats. ie Malfoy
Favorite class: DADA and Potions.
Least favorite class: history of magic
Patronus: cat
Pet: Black cat named train
Wand: mix of apple wood and maple.
Wand core: a few of his own tail hairs.
Marital status: single
Relationship with Chavonne: First friend
Quote: has several. on is "Holy rabies!" says it when exited. "You remind me of the babe..." says when he thinks someone is good looking.
Mrs. T chapter 2 . 1/9/2018
Name: Talula “Tally” Ermine

Age (And Birthday): 12 (December 12th)

Year: One(First Year Student)

House: Slytherin

Appearance: Tally is a rather gangly twelve year old who seems to be mostly limbs, she has messy brown hair and dark blue eyes. She is a little bit on the tall side around 160cm and has yet to really grow into her height, and is also a bit thin at 34kgs. Tally’s skin-tone is fairly light, one that implies easy burning.

Blood Status: Muggleborn(With a Pureblood Squib Great Grandfather)

Sexuality: Asexual, Biromantic

Family: Tally is a single child to two parents, Adolf Ermine and Francine Ermine. She is particularly close to her Squib Grandfather Dominique from the “extinct” Auer Pureblood family line.

Friends: Tally doesn’t really have friends, but she does have two “associates” who hang around with her. A rather squirrely boy named Robert Dunnovan and a snappy girl, who grins like a shark named Mira Kathrinson

Personality: Tally is every bit a spoilt rich kid, similar to Malfoy she expects everything to be handed to her on a silver platter, but unlike Malfoy when problems arise she doesn’t go running to her parents demanding a solution. Tally has learnt the manipulation game, she studies what people say and learns from it. Keeping everything in mind and finding the points of weakness, before attacking them. She can be rather petty though, and lords her victories over others. She is sadistic in her treatment of enemies, toying with them much like a cat might a mouse, it is this toying that is her biggest weakness, as often she fails to act swiftly enough for her revenge to have any real meaning or lasting impact. She is considered to be something of a bossy sourpuss by those close to her, and tends to speak with a bland and monotone voice and the utmost seriousness unless one can break her composure.

Should one be able to break through her walls, they would find an insecure girl who is desperate for true companionship and is actually rather interested in a spirited debate and settling down to watch some good old slapstick cartoons.

History: Tally was born to two parents who both have high, high paying jobs. Born into a business family, Tally grew up in an environment that was pretty cut-throat and lavish. She was surrounded by luxury, but didn’t really get much real attention from her parents. She had a personal butler who watched her, and two children who were basically assigned to be her “companions” but didn’t really form any real connection with them. She was taught how to handle money, and network by her Grandfather, who was the only adult who really taught her anything, and he would often wax poetic about how his family line was noble and old, something that she carried over with her once she got the game Hogwarts Online where she modelled the origin of being an extinct pureblood family line.

Quidditch (Thoughts on it, do they play it, what position, how good are they): Tally’s view of Quidditch is faily dismal, it doesn’t make the most sense so she doesn’t really care for it as a concept, she actually does play it though, and enjoys playing it seeing it as an opportunity to show off her skills on the broom. She actually plays as a beater, and she is pretty efficient with her bat, having a good aim, although she often tends to overbalance when she’s more focused on whacking the bludger at her target rather than staying on the broom.

Clothes Outside of Class: Tally continues to wear fairly formal attire even outside of class, wearing a suit top and jacket along with a rather modest skirt and plain school shoes on her feet. It makes her look like she’s been taken straight from a junior business class and is just lacking her briefcase and/or a clipboard.

Formal Attire: She has both a nice long formal dress in dark blue, and a set of nice and high quality silk dress robes in a more royal blue.

Accessories (Prefect Badges, jewelry, etc.): At this point the only accessory that Tally has is a pocket watch that she has pinned to the inside of her suit jacket, that she swaps to each new outfit as needed. She does however have various bits of jewlery that she will wear when she feels the need, notably a chain necklace with the old Auer family crest on it at the end of the golden chain.

Likes: Peace, Slapstick Cartoons, The colour blue, reading autobiographies in her spare time, investigating mysteries, swimming, order, wolves, and listening to the rain

Dislikes: Chaos, people interrupting her cartoons, that one shade of puke green, mystery novels that fail to mystery, too many loud chickens, Fang’s slobber all over her, firestorms, and being trapped in the darkness

Favorite Class: Transfiguration

Least Favorite Class: Charms

What Would Their Patronus Be: Her Patronus, somewhat given away by her name is actually the Ermine

Pets: Tally has a rather unique pet, in the form of an albino silver fox named Rose. Yes she is a domesticated fox.

Wand Description: Tally has an applewood wand with a couple of hairs from her fox companion as the core, it’s about 10 inches long and is reasonably bendy.

Marital Status (Dating or Single, or if they have a Crush, etc): Very firmly single, although she is open to a potential relationship.

Relationship With Chavonne: They wouldn’t know each other, and if and when they do meet Tally would be mostly indifferent to Chavonne, she might find the elder annoying on occasion but she wouldn’t go out of her way to make her an enemy or a friend. The potential could go either way.

A Quote, and when they would say it: “Well, I personally would say that went rather well” typically something that she would say in response to someone making an absolute fool out of themselves in front of her.

Plot ideas (absolutely optional): For the most part, I feel like Tally would be a background character, but if you wish to bring her into the spotlight, she will definitely be needing tutoring in Charms and DADA since those would be subjects that she’d struggle with. Also, if any kind of mystery plot comes up, Tally would be forcing herself into the mystery just because she wants to be there and solving it.

Anything else?: Tally is actually deadly allergic to bee stings, and also has a milder allergy to peanuts that gives her a rash and makes her itchy all over. Also a little known fact about Tally would be the fact that she is incredibly, incredibly sensitive to sound thus why she struggles when exposed to a lot of noise.

Also, if a Dementor is encountered, it will bring up a memory of when she was kidnapped by a man who she was convinced was going to kill her before he was caught by the police. Afterwards she would be mostly unresponsive until given some chocolate and calmed back down. (Her boggat would be the same man, knife wielding and covered in blood laughing somewhat maniacally)

Tally has Emetophobia(fear of vomit/vomiting)
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This is an interesting premise, and I will carefully watch to see for any more updates, in reference to me, you may call my Mrs. T as the creator of Tally. And any extra needed information only needs to be asked for. Thankyou. Hope you have fun writing. (also don’t forget to credit people because wow)
Zelia Storm Wayne chapter 1 . 4/18/2017
I realized I forgot to say how she knew Chavonne, ;P lol, which would be that Elysium met Chavonne when she lived in Europe. Whether they have kept in touch or not would be up to you.
Zelia Storm Wayne chapter 2 . 4/18/2017
I enjoy the idea for this story, and can't wait to see more u, and, if your still excepting...
-Name: Elysium Holmes
-Age(and birthday): 16, November 13
-year: 5th
-House: Slytherin
-Appearance: Red hair with ringlet curls that come to the middle of her back. Blue-gray eyes and very pail skin. About 5'7" with no figure.(like Haruhi ;) ) A scar on her left hand from where she accidentally stabbed herself.
-Blood Status: Half-blood
-Sexuality: Strait
-Family: A mother(Krista Holmes), father (Francois Holmes) and two older sisters (Ilione and Pandora Holmes)
-Friends: Chavonne Lehmkuhl, Terence Higgs, Theodore Nott
-Personality: Elysium is a bit clumsy, with a bad habit of drawing in the corners of her notebook during class. She likes to procrastinate, leaving thing to the last minute, but always get what she needs to done. She is an ambivert, not really taking to much until she gets closer to you, and never goes back on her word. She is a major fan girl and likes to refer to the things she is into, as well as Sherlock jokes, due to her last name.
- American by birth(though she sounds Scottish),Elysium has spent most of her life in Europe with her father. She doesn't really get along with her mother, who lives in New York with a job at the Museum of Natural History as an expert in all things Greek. She was introduced to Harry Potter by her sisters, who read it to her when she was really young. When they left to live with Krista, Elysium immersed herself in Harry Potter as a connection to her sisters and one of the few things she actually liked, along side with anime and the fandom's of SuperWhoLock. She managed to snag a copy of the game through a friend of her dad.
-Quidditch(thoughts on it, do they play it, what position, how good are they): Though not very into the game herself, Elysium always goes to the games to cheer on her friends and has fun racing around, as well as doing trick, on her broom.
-Clothes Outside of Class: Colorful camisoles with matching Flannel over shirts(though never pink and rarely anything with light purple), plain white converses(never clean), and boot-cut jeans (the darker the better)
-Formal attire: Black, knee cut dress that is longer in the back then the front. Spaghetti straps and dark silver sparkle flowers around the Gray clutch and lace up boots.
-Accessories(Preferred Bandages, jewelry, etc.):Plain black, analog watch with black finger-less gloves that go to her wrist
-Likes: Reading, writing, drawing, and hanging out with people who share her interests
-Dislikes: Snobby people, high and mighty people, jerks, and spinach
-Favorite Class: Potions
-Least Favorite Class: Divination
-What would their Patronus Be: Dun Stallion
-Pet: Elf Owl named Gylfie
-Wand Description: Beech wood with a Dragon heartstring core, 13" and Quite Bendy flexibility
-Martal Status: Single
-A Quote, and when they would say it: "Nuts and Bolts", said when something has gone wrong
Reaper7 chapter 2 . 3/6/2017
Name: Nicholas Draculin

Age: 19

House: Slytherin

Appearance: Tall (a solid 6'2"), lightly muscled, black eyes and hair, round face that makes him look younger, and an almost permanent lazy grin that is either teasing or condescending.

Blood Status: pure-blood

Sexuality: Straight

Family: Orphan

Personality: While having a disarming and kind face usually, Nicholas has perfected the art of talking. Specifically, he enjoys talking to people and insulting them either so slightly that you can't tell unless you're looking for said insult, or so blatantly that he'll end up sending someone into a depression at best. At worst... well, he doesn't tell.
While a good deal of people hate him for this, he does this to everyone because he enjoys their reactions, thus it's easier to determine who's more fun. He also enjoys making innuendos, puns, and even some rather invasive questions to those he deems friends. Those he sees as enemies or hostiles will sometimes find themselves insulted and belittled in such a way that many would call downright abusive.
It should be noted that this also makes him good at politics, as he can bullshit himself out of/into any situation with a few sweet words or even cold hard facts. He's also greedy, always looking for ways to make money quickly through extortion, blackmailing, and even threatening. These kinds of activities he keeps away from his friends, though if enough friends tell him to stop he will be very likely to do so. He also enjoys making fun of Chavonne because of her height, either calling her 'tiny one', or asking if she wants a stool or a lift to reach things.

History: From an early age, Nicholas learned that the truth hurts. It hurt his parents who ended up splitting because his mother was cheating on his alcoholic father, it hurt one of his friends because she learned she had cancer, and it hurt him when his mother left him at an orphanage because she admitted she didn't want him in the first place. At the orphanage, he learned his second lesson: if you're not winning, you're losing. He watched other kids be adopted while he stayed behind, he saw the older kids become bitter and bully other kids, and he learned unless he was doing better than the other kids, he would end up like most of them: either a nobody that will eventually fade into the crowd, or dead and forgotten. It took years before he was old enough to take care of himself, and read enough of the Harry Potter books to know that Tom Marvolo Riddle is an interesting and understandable guy. While he doesn’t believe in what the madman said about blood purity, Nicholas admires the way he managed to bring people together under his rule. Time will tell if he chooses to become a Deatheater, or do what he knows is right.

Quidditch (thoughts on it, do they play, what position, how good are they): While not a big fan of the sport, he enjoys playing it simply because he likes flying and the freedom if grants him. If he can be convinced to play, he will choose to be a beater to hit those bludgers and hopefully hit another person. While not particular fast, he is good at maneuvering and tight turns, as well as barrel rolls and loops.

Clothes Outside of Class: Black slacks, a green long-sleeved shirt, and a dark-brown vest.

Formal Attire: A black suit and tie with a green dress shirt and a small cape that reaches mid-biceps.

Accessories: A single silver ring that, should Chavonne manage to gain his trust, he will confess belonged to his father and was given to Nicholas when said father left. Nicholas keeps it to remind himself that his own relationship will not be like that of his parents. He wears it on his right middle finger.

Likes: winning, talking to people and either insulting them lightly (to his enemies and people he doesn’t like), or teasing (to his friends and people he likes), the outdoors, just about any form of cake, Tom’s tactics and rise to power, and music.

Dislikes: Losing, being alone for long periods of time, the madman that Riddle has become, people harming those he thinks are nice to him, and food going to waste.

Favorite Class: Potions

Least Favorite Class: Transfiguration

What would their patronus be: a basketball-sized hedgehog curled up and rolling around.

Pets: (Asura) a four-foot long red snake with black lines going down her body with two above her eyes making it look like she’s always glaring.
(Ares) a barn owl that, despite the name, looks almost like it’s always smiling brightly.

Wand Description: thirteen inches, unicorn hair core, cedar wood, rigid, but not unbending, good for dueling

Marital Status: single

Relationship with Chavonne: since he begins knowing nothing about her, he teases her about her height by default. Depending on how she reacts, he will either become a friend that will continue to tease her and protect her behind the scenes, or a minor antagonist that will try to get her in trouble or (should it escalate enough in the future) outright attack her either verbally, socially, or even physically.

Quote and when they should say it: “You exist because I allow it. You will disappear because I demand it.” To his enemies should he choose to be merciful.
“I want cake, you? Let’s get cake!” to his friends, usually at random times.

Plot ideas: I’ll leave him becoming friends with Chavonne up to you. For the most part, he will be sneaking around, eavesdropping on people, and gaining as much information as possible. Mostly for blackmail material, gaining information, and learning all he can. He’ll also be mildly obsessed with gaining enough power and skill to fight off anyone/thing that he faces. Once you choose what role he’ll play (if you choose him at all), I’ll let you know more if you want.

Extra: cedar wood is known to belong to one who “has the potential to be a frightening adversary.
Amarenima Redwood chapter 2 . 3/5/2017
Name: Cordilia Gandor (fake name)
Age: 18 (March 27th)
Year: 7th
House: Slytherin
Appearance: Dark Brown hair with golden highlights that is kept in a braid that falls to mid back. Pale-ish skin. About 5 feet 5 inches tall. ~180 lbs. Moss green eyes.
Blood status: Half-Blood
Sexuality: Straight
Family: Mom- Hanna Gandor
Dad- Luck Gandor
Younger Brother- Charles Gandor
Stepsister- Rebecca Carleston (married name)
Uncles- Berga Gandor, Kieth Gandor, Firo, Felix Walken
Aunts- Channe Walken, Ennis
(I apologize for the Baccano! references ;) Feel free to actually make them immortal or not. Just not Cordilia.)
Friends: Czeslaw Meyer, Duke Francis, Brad Coolidge, Rebbecca Mirana
Personality: Serious and sarcastic but does have a sense of humor. Calm in most situations, unless you hurt her family or friends (physically, emotionally, or verbally), then she turns violent. Prefers to reserve judgement until she sees things with her own eyes. Over protective of her younger brother.
History: Born to Hanna Gandor and Luck Gandor, she grew up in the Bronx with a Mafia and a Camorra family. Not really much she can say. (Make up what you want)
Quidditch: she couldn't care less. She much prefers knife fighting, soccer, hand to hand combat and Gymnastics.
Clothes outside of class: Plain T-Shirts an blue jeans. Combat boots.
Formal attire: Dark blue dress with easy to move in skirt. Wears flats. Dark blue gloves.
Accessories: A combat knife. A blue gemstone rose necklace.
Likes: Reading, learning and inventing new spells and potions, charms, Cooking, math, Anime & Manga (loves Fullmetal Alchemist), Harry Potter Novels, playing Poker, Star Wars
Dislikes: Writing, Harry Potter Movies (except for Alan Rickman), Anyone in the Runaratta Family
Favorite class: Charms
Least Favorite: Transfiguration (probably because of FMA)
Patronus: panther
Pets: A reddish half-knezzle Tomcat called "Clair"
Wand Description: Redwood with a Dragon Heartstring core, 11.5 inches, Slightly springy.
Marital Status: Single
Quote: Watch your Goddamn tongue if you don't want me to cut it out. Said when someone says something she doesn't like (I entirely blame Berga for this one.)
Helios.J.Mears chapter 2 . 2/26/2017
Good GOD Chavonne is a blast! It's like every moment is an endless bombardment of energy and cute! This chapter blew my expectations COMPLETELY out of the water. I eagerly await a new chapter!
KieranDell1409 chapter 2 . 2/26/2017
So, about the form...are you only accepting new OCs, or can I submit my RWBY OCs (slightly modified for the HP universe, obviously)?
tobi-is-an-artist-too chapter 2 . 2/24/2017
Haha chavonne is adorable like far to precious for this world and she has some new friends which is awesome. They all sound pretty great and I can't wait to see a bit more of them. Also quick question and I know your sick of those lol did I give you a length?
W. R. Winters chapter 2 . 2/24/2017
I'm going to guess that Vincent, Warren and Chavonne are going to be in a love triangle. This is going to get interesting

Excellent chapter and I can't wait for the next one
Luna Lovegood 777 chapter 1 . 2/14/2017
Name:Luna(not real name but still)
Age:12 (3/2)(March 2)
Year: 2nd(?)
House: Ravenclaw
Appearance:Black hair in ponytail, fleece (usually black)and black pants with Uggs( winter) sneakers (summer)
Blood status: half-blood
Sexuality: ? (None)
Family: Parents( bad tempered dad) 2 younger sisters (both annoying, one 11, and one 4), cousin, grandparents
Friends: a lot love anime, some meh, some NO
Personality: blunt (extremely to annoy people) procrastinator,
History: not much went to muggle school before it
Quidditch: interesting but a lot of injuries, could play seeker, ok?
Clothes outside: disribed in appearance
Formal attire: hair down ( straight) dress and FLATS ( even if it's formal I need to be able to run or I'll go insane( not literally but you know what I mean))
Accessories: earrings (studs with my birthstone)
Likes:anime, FOOD( sushi, steak, chocolate, etc.) fantasy books, games ( though I'm bad at it)
Dislikes:homework, writing,
Favorite class:DADA or charms
Least favorite class:(IDK)
Patronus: dapple grey stallion
Pet:owl
Wand:alder wood with unicorn hair core 10 3/4 and surprisingly swishy flexibility
Marital status: single
Met in diagon ally and became friends
Quote:( IDK)
Anything else: I can skate and use a lot of sarcasm
Revlen Rozamu chapter 1 . 2/13/2017
Ok I'll bite I love Harry Potter and the concept of SAO so I'll send an OC in.
tobi-is-an-artist-too chapter 1 . 2/13/2017
Okay...this is new pretty cool just not sure if I should send an OC not really an expert in the hogwarts department...who am I kidding this is awesome like super awesome and I will clamber together my limited wizard knowledge to make you an awesome OC but regardless I'll stick around.
KieranDell1409 chapter 1 . 2/13/2017
You have my interest.
robbo2480 chapter 1 . 2/12/2017
Interesting idea. Look forward to reading this