A short and bittersweet oneshot, and written with superb descriptive writing as far as I am concerned. Your talent for conveying emotions without spoken words remains evident. I take it the plans for the next addition to this are what happens after the events, here?

Maybe the comedy didn't go exactly as you planned, but I found it realistic and to the point. You conveyed the personalities and emotions of these two rather well, an accomplishment in and of itself. Each of the different scenarios you portrayed are both plausible and well-structured. All in all, another job well done my friend!

AWwwwwwwwww! I love this so much! So perfect.

These fragments hold a lot of promise, and any one of them could be expanded further into its own short story. I think you do a good job of showing the development of their relationship in a short space, and I'm still hoping to see more development with this oft-quoted encounter with Maul. Good work!

Cute