Reviews for Twisted
SYW chapter 20 . 5/28/2018
Finally getting around to review this! I usually try to review stories one or two days max after reading them, since I feel like after that, at least for what it concerns me, I end up forgetting so many details and specific things I wanted to mention. For that reason, instead of only reading the new chapter I decided that after that, I was gonna re-read the entire story from scratch before reviewing it. And you have no idea how happy I am that I did! After knowing how everything unfolds, reading it again and catching all the foreshadowing is so worth it, especially since there is so much of it.

This has to be my favourite story of yours so far. I think it's the most emotional out of them all, and it has so much character I'm speechless. I'm honestly having a hard time reviewing it, because there is just so much I wanna say! You always managed to switch between present and past storyline at the perfect time, and the likeless of some aspects of them was so mind-blowing. I especially loved chapter 16 for this reason. The frequent switch was very clever in that moment, and the last scene is so heartbreaking. I grew extremely attached to Loki and Crystal's relationship in this fic, and the way it developed was so unexpected and brilliant!

Now for the foreshadowing. I can't stress enough how good it was to re-read this fic for this very reason. There are so many things that you can get on a first read (like that part where the Curious brothers bet on who between Circe and Loki's gonna cheat first, and then Vidcund at the end of the chapter mentioning that, well, Loki was the one who cheated first after all!) , but so many others go unnoticed unless you know where it's going. Just like the strand of hair on the Memorium, who was very clear from the start that it had to be Crystal's, due to the unique color and lenght. But exactly because it was so clear, I didn't think it was gonna come up later (or well...technically speaking, before) in the fic, but it did!
Again, as I said that other time, you explain just the right amount :)
I also loved that bit with the Unsavory Charlatan, now it makes even more sense that he hates Pascal in Survivor haha!
Other similar moments I loved were that part of Vid telling Circe Pascal was pregnant, and everything that followed after; Loki rehiring Cassandra, which I personally interpreted as him momentarily making up his mind and deciding he wanted to be with Crystal and just letting Vid do this thing, but let me know if I got the message wrong; Pascal saving the blender and all that came from it; Loki having having dèjà vu of using the Memorium, and probably my favourite, "Loki too filled with pride to beg his ex for a second chance...or so he thought." that was so clever.

Honorable mention to Erin & Loki moments! I can never quite imagine how they interact but I think your interpretation is very spot on. Their dialogue after the picnic was so sincere, I loved it.
Also honorable mention to Kitty's chapter! That one's among my favourites as well, it was both hilarious and very domestic, in a sense. And I loved how it built up to Pascal saying "I hope I can be the parent you deserve. But even if I'm half the parent my mother was, you'll have a wonderful life." to his belly. It's one of my favourite lines from the story, for sure. As well as the one I referenced in the caption of that drawing I made (and I promise I'll make something a bit more decent for you one day! I really had to rush all those sketches and I don't like them very much), that was extremely smooth. I love how easy it is to taste the sexual tension between Loki and Crystal from the very moment they meet, and I feel like when it all wraps up in that very moment at Loki's house, it feels relieving. There are so many sweet, adorable instances too, during the rest of the story, I loved the over-the-top explosion to ask Crystal out and several other bits.

I know this is a giant review and I'm already trying to summarize as much as I can, but I swear I'm almost done.

The big topic of this story seems to be the three main characters not managing to make up their mind when it comes to relationships, and I enjoyed seeing how everyone found closure in the end, in a way or another. Loki asking both Crystal and Vidcund to stop his wedding, not wanting to take responsibility for his own actions, almost losing everything like Crystal had predicted, and finally understanding he too, can love, and dropping the act, is such a powerful character development. I think it's also interesting how Crystal, who seems to think of herself as very responsible and mature, ended up doing quite a few mistakes along the way as well, changing her mind just as often, because that's human nature after all. Vidcund was maybe the one who managed to deal with his emotions better than anyone else, to an extent.

Before I finish this however, I have a perplexity in regards of the middle part of the last chapter, and I feel like I'm missing something obvious to put two and two together. After the drunken confession, and after they have their talk during the morning, Loki and Crystal decide to get married in Pleasantview, but what I'm not getting is if it's for a specific purpose not related to their feelings or what? And after that, why do they decide to erase their memories from that very day, instead of calling Loki and Circe's wedding off / having Crystal object, considering that now both Loki and Crystal want to marry eachother? (unless I got their morning talk wrong?). I found that part from there up to where Loki rejects Crystal saying that he can't marry someone who loves him to be very confusing even after re-reading the chapter a few times, and I still can't wrap my head around it, so I would like some clarification if possible!

Okay, I think I've said everything haha, thanks for writing such a great story. I can't wait for more! :)
avarose0214 chapter 1 . 2/21/2018
God, I love how you portray Pascal XD
Guest chapter 9 . 6/4/2017
Perfect! I hope Loki stops acting like a moron and they walk through it all.
makara3 chapter 8 . 5/19/2017
Hey, I liked your story very much.
Why is Loki still with Circe with all that happened?
OMG will Pascal date Nervous? Will Lazlo date Erin?
I loved it. Please, keep on.
Yow chapter 2 . 4/2/2017
OH MY GOD. I JUST REALIZED THAT THEY AREN'T YOUR OC *sob* I'M SO SORRYYYYYYYY.
I played the Sims 3 and 4 only, and I don't really know much about the first two games :( I feel really bad.
But I'm still gonna praise you for your work. Idk much about the Curious bro, but you made them look alive.
And of course, the most matter thing is your story and they way your write them beautifully.
My opinion still doesn't change. You're doing good and this fic is awesome.
Yow chapter 1 . 4/2/2017
Even though it's not the regular story of Goth fam and their friends, I found your story VERY entertaining and well connected xD the plot is good and you drop jokes here and there (everywhere) I almost didn't see them coming (that doesn't it's not good. I really enjoy all of them)
I wish I know what the characters look like. The Curious bro looks like people that fun to be around.
Eventhough this story consists with your OCs, the way you write them is clearly well-made and they're enjoyable to read. I couldn't see how much effort you put, but I know it's pretty high xD good story brings happy reader. I hope more people will read and appreciate this fic.
Keep going. You're doing good.
Kell Miller chapter 1 . 2/19/2017
Hey I like your story you should make more