Love it so far...

I'm really enjoying your story! It brings the universe to life and shows what its like just living in the Elite world. Besides spell/grammatical checking, keep up the good work!

This...this is good. Grammar is where it needs to be, very few errors. Character development is on point, despite the lack of visual descriptors. Excellent use of lore to bring some life to the setting. 9/10, would read IGN