Your story is very interesting and seems to have a good plot. It is very interesting to read and I will be interested in seeing if you finish at this level. With that being said, I notice that you are from the United States. Are you a native English speaker? You write well but have a greater than average number of grammar/spelling mistakes. It is to the point where it does make your writing difficult to read. I would recommend getting a Beta or having someone proofread for you. You have a talent for writing and I would strongly recommend that you continue to work on your craft and practice your spelling and grammar. You have talent, everything else is workable.

Might be a good story, but it is too difficult to read. Words are missing and some sentences just don't make sense. I hope English is not your first language.

Update?.

Awe Harry is so adorable. Hope everything can be easier after sev reads the books.

Awesome

Very good storyline, I can't wait to read more. Side note, please you spellcheck. Spelling errors always take away from a good plot.

Awesome can't wait to see what is next

This is very goodthe story line is really well done, there are a few spelling mistakes but overall I really enjoyed this. Keep up the good work