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The story is not bad, but I'd suggest another round of editing. Mercenaries are called Sellswords and using company names would be a lot smoother to read than just saying Essos Mercenaries. Sometimes the numbers are too specific/accurate and rounding/estimatingnearly twenty thousand" rather than 17500) makes it sound more fitting since accurate troop counts weren't really a thing.

Infantry is more often than not called Foot while Cavalry are the Horse(men) or Knights of a force. The term soldier is misplaced since most of the fighting forces in GoT are either levies, men-at-arms, or part of a retinue. Professional armies were not a thing, which is why the term soldier doesn't fit.

Those are all minor complaints, but those are the things which make a story sound like it is part of the GoT universe.

Awesome chapter hope to see more of it

OMG! Young Ned is so much like Young Robb, why did I only just find this!

is the story Finnished

The action sequences are boring and as flavorful as cardboard. The choreography is nothing but hack and slash, it isn't exciting to read making it a chore, though you tried to make it intricate it lacked flavor. A fight that was supposed to be a life and death struggle needs to have weight on it and not feel like a burden to read.

Update more chapters about this story,because it's the best,extra and the great story that I was reading about it,and I am also starting to love and to like reading to this story. So can you please write more chapters,because I want to know what happens in the next chapters about it. THANKS SO MUCH FOR WRITTEN TO THIS STORY,thanks so much about it.&&&£££%%%$$$

good fic

Why is Catelyn hated? Not so much if I saw correctly the number of Ned/Cat, there are more numerous than the other like Ned/Cerseï or Ned/Ashara. But in my case, I hated her because for me she is the one who brings down House Stark, all her decisions after Bran is push from the tower will create more problems than solutions! Arresting Tyrion, going to the Vale with him, negotiating bad term for her son, impeding his authority, the education of her children in a southern way instead of a northern way (this one can also be apply to Ned, he should have been more of a Lord and less than a father, error of a second son probably) Arya is so much like Lyanna, Ned should have known than she will never have been a southern Lady and fostered her with the Mormont. Well, to resume, even after more than half of her life in the North, she doesn't understand the North and spite on their loyalty when she accepted marriage to the Frey. Of course, this is my own view on her, that doesn't mean I am right, it's just what I think.

Interesting chapter and plot and idea

First of all I would like to inform you, if no one else has, that this is a highly interesting story. I really like the premise and the way you portray the characters, as well as the problems that are set for the characters to work around. It is hard to find a good story that doesn't make romance the key factor, particularly in this fandom, but you do well. I salute you thus far and look forward to reading more.

Are you ever gonna write? The plot was amazing. Please write
I can be the beta reader as well.
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chapter was good,I enjoyed ,may I ask you a couple of quiestions?What happened with Stannis,Renly,Davos and 500 men,defending Storm's End?Will they support Eddard's claim,or will fight for themselves?If Storm's End is gone,Ned will have another problem in 40000 reachmen loyalists,marching North.I intereseted in fate Stannis.

Are you ever gonna write this story. It is such a promising plot, please resume writing. My email id is - . Any reply would be appreciated. I can be your beta reader as well.

When are you gonna publish your new story?/ It's been forever