Wow this chapter was awful. Don’t even want to read the rest of the story because of how boring and awful this was set up

The structure, and format of the story is incredibly difficult to read. I can tolerate the constant POV changes, although five times a chapter is a bit too much. What really makes the story too much effort is the way you structure your dialogues - integrating dialogue in huge blocks of text (paragraphs). The plot may have been good, but it's a trial of patience to complete a single chapter. My utmost respect for those whom trudged on.

update?

right bro better release a chapter or two or face judgement lightning

they say kriff man not fuck anyways u doing good

I cannot continue it.

All I could do reading this story is cringe at how bad it is nothing makes sense. Like oh a spaceship lets go in and then not report it or just leave it alone. Oh is that a pile of bones let's bury it even tho I have like nothing to dig wit durrr. It seems the MC gets dumber the longer he's alive. The whole story just gets more cringe the MC is somehow in college even though it shows he's actually mentally retarted, like spaceships are soo cool lets go inside and press some buttons... Please give us the readers some warning when you want to make the MC mentally retarted. I don't have the patience to read stories with people with hardcore mental disorders.

Hey, I wanted to say that the idea for this story is pretty cool so far, however, I can’t keep reading it. I tried to power through, hoping that the writing would improve, but it’s consistent and after browsing through some of the reviews, I can see that I’m not the only one who feels this way. From one author to another, you should listen to your readers. Usually, if they take the tile and effort to actually write a review, it’s because they want to help you improve as a writer. I hope you actually read this and take it to heart. The talent is there, just needs a bit of fine tuning.

It doesn’t really matter how force sensitive you are the Jedi would never accept someone who is an adult or teenager. Hell they barely accepted anakin who was only nine into the order.

Isn’t the royal guards always supposed to protect the royalty

I'm sorry but i can't continue reading this the Pov changes makes it a rather hard story to read

Id suggest doing a rewrite and keeping it to only the MC's Pov

Needs a lot of work the constant Pov changes come across really badly and just takes you out of the scene stick with the Pov of the MC rather than switching it around constantly

But i'm going to keep reading one bad chapter won't ruin a story for me

This is not a path of the story I can digest so... good luck in future writing

Wow... Devin has officially become a badass!

Such an adorable story. I am really interested in some a Asajj loving because these kinds of stories are very rare.
So keep up the awesome work