Pretty sure you said luna was killed but shes still alive after that chpater

Nice story so far. While it flowed fast at some points, you still managed to be descriptive instead of acting like a diary entry.

Well crap, if that staff is broken then Harry has lost the chance to break the curse on his family. I would kill Branka for that.

personally I thought that that this story was new and intriguing and I liked the way you integrated it.

Luna again, gosh it's in every crossover.. whatever, anyway he has a wife, yet it's a leliana pairing? threesome? or harem? damn I'm sick of that theme..

so this is an OC story and not harry potter crossover? why post it here?

Uhm. What... Chapter 1 his name is talion the name Harry is never mentioned. Chapter 2 suddenly the name Harry is being used and he introduces himself as harry

I love how the story goes, but I would like to know, will you continue the story of Iron Man or Ghost Rider? is that I'm in suspense to know what's next.

Hey why don't you put the original up and just use the content from the old story to make a new one. also if people complain about Harry Potter not being Harry Potter then they should read the J. K. Rowling books not fanfiction. I loved the original and I have some suggestions if its not too late to keep the story as is. First, Harry is Harry when he is with his friends, you had a good start with him an Luna but as the blight begins in earnest you should add in Hermione and Ron or someone else. this is because as I have play all the dragon age games the characters are easy to get to know and its fun to see them in new situations so having them interact with Harry Potter characters is a must to add interest to the story such as having Fred and George play pranks on the always serious Sten. You need to add a little comedic relief but only enough to take away the tension but not take too much away from the story

I’m down for whatever just know I’m looking forward to reading it

i liked the harry being in the story without him i be sad...

If you want to rewrite that’s your choice my friend however do me one favor look over your current story again and really think if you want to change it because as it is so far I think it’s great

This Hary Potter is not "The Harry PotterI was expecting
I'm kind of disappointed about this... it's more like an OC who looks like Harry but his abilities, storyline, and personality said otherwise

...it's not Harry potter. That's my review. It's an OC with the name plastered over him. No personality, appearance or even magic. This shouldn't be in the crossover section and the intro should be changed.

That sounds more like a blessing, not a curse