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I love this it’s so cute and I laughed so many times when the host club interrupted his attempts to propose

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I don't know why this keeps being removed from my favorite list even though I remember reviewing it several times. Oh well, I guess I will do so again, great story and l loved the character growth. Maybe this time it will not be removed.

OKAY SO I WAS HOLDING OFF ON THIS UNTIL I FINISHED THE STORY, BUT I COULDN'T. THIS IS AWESOME I LOVE IT AND AIGHRAOGHAWOGIAWG

Very good. well done!

This is soon cute! I love your use of OCs. You really make them blend.

I was worried that if you replaced Haruhi’s scene with her then the bonding moments with Tamaki would decrease. But this chapter you still managed to include the thunder scene. So good job.
And addressing the sibling situation and bringing it up was nice.

There’s the teasing technique I was looking for.
I’m not sure I liked that she took over Haruhi’s position...unoriginal tactic.
Once and a while is okay. But not too much.

Haruhi pushing her into the changing room for 10% off was funny.
Reading your Q&A. I guess it is true. I have to remember this is an anime. And sometimes those magical invisible powers do exist.
About the last one. About Kyoya doing it to tease her. It makes sense. Personally, it would’ve been a little more specified if he had some chuckling or a quote on his thoughts that portrayed how he found enjoyment in teasing her after said actions.

Strange how she got pulled into their arguement. I dont believe there was any previous interaction that would make Kaoru crush on her.
I did like when she mentioned that Haruhi didn’t have to negotiate their house. That’s what I thought too during that episode.
The ending was nice. Someone came into their world and now they’re together.

At least they’re noticing her now.
Haha, “Tamaki release!”

In the first chapter, it’s weird how she goes unnoticed. I mean the host club is suppose to make all girls swoon over them. But they just ignored her. I get that that’s the attribute you’re trying to give her, but I just can’t imagine that to such extent. With such lack of conversation.
Chapter 2? Her being invisible enough to take pictures of the host members for the picture book was a good tie in to how he managed to take those pictures (so much better than the original “hidden cameras”).
Chapter three. The fanfiction joke was on point! Lol.
And the little snippet of the nurse loving her job was a nice add in.
Kyoya saying how she’s “sexy” and about her half naked is a little out of character.

it's great so far still reading

no the hell you didn't