DAMNIT Ned. Do yer lovely job and write me a beautiful story. I've been reading your stories since the beginning of DBZ court. So don't stop now, old buddy old pal. Get your head in the game. I need your wisecrack remarks. You're pretty much my fan fiction childhood. Oh and by the way, do you watch super?

Your writing's so good and realistic. I love the way you balance Goku's optimistic and innocent point of view and Matt and Seina's dark reality. Please, keep going on.

Huh, I had been waiting anxiously for the moment Matt or Seina would end up shooting someone all by hoping it wouldn't happen. This looked definitely like a turn in the story and I guess it means darkness might coat the rest of the plot.

OR Dr Briefs only received a minor injury, Matt takes him to the hospital, apologizes, gets forgiven and decides to get involved into humanitarian aid by opening a refuge for one-legged penguins... I have a faint doubt about it though. Keep going on.

I'm still enjoying this so much and now I need to hold my breath until next chapter. I really like your main characters and I can't wait for the shock of their dark world meeting the colored canon world of db.

It's getting more and more interesting. I wonder if Seina is somehow following the same path as Matt, I'm curious to know why she sticks to him in the first place (I thought she has maybe something to wish as well but then she would have just left him behind, so I'm clueless so far). I really enjoy your story.

Gosh, your story has something I like, sort of "damnation while searching redemption", it's really smart. So this murder was sin number 1 and I guess your character isn't done going down the hill. I'll wait for next chapter. Good job.

This story actually portrays how a normal person would look for dragon balls and I love that. You really have a way of explaining everything, I salute you for that.

Whoa, this is awesome. I love the character development and the whole pacing of the story. You did yet another awesome job here. Congrats. I'm glad you decided to do a serious story instead of another humor filled one. Otherwise, we would have missed this masterpiece. I'll be waiting for the next chapters.

I found this story by sheer luck and I'm really glad I did. I was a bit afraid about the OC but I trusted you enough to take the plunge and I have to say you managed to hook me in the very first lines. The prologue reminded me of an old Stephen King. Keep going on.