wow! totally different and I love it! how different things would have been for Luna with him as her champion. I would love to read more..

Sirius' alliterating by saying the phrase "rear release" made my allegedly grownup copy editor side smile and my inner three year old, who liked the fart joke Sirius made loads, giggle.
I liked the alliteration in "subtler symptoms".
And in "need never".
People who refer to close friends as being like brothers or sisters IMO have never had brothers or sisters in real life.
I like Charlus' plan to adopt Sirius and to blackmail Sirius father and uncle into settling with him (Charlus) out of court loads.
I like the assonance in "actually abandoned".
I was very amused by Dorea calling Sirius' parents "little globules of boggart droppings".
I liked the alliteration in "'former family".
"Great-Aunt" should be hyphenated.

True love indeed if Hermione willing to kiss Harry who just recently vomited.

I really hate these Harry becoming crazy like joker even without going through anything mild Joker has gone through before becoming how he is. The comics where Barbara Gordon became paralyzed is a great story of his life before joker.

Only someone insane would suggest to train their children with Moody.

First of all death eaters would have seen his relatives escaping beforehand and secondly I think Harry should at least felt disgusted after kissing Hermione who looks like his aunt no matter how much he likes her.

This needs a full story even if it contains only ten or fewer chapters.

hahaha, great take. This shot looks like a promising start.

EW! At that exaggerated snot bubble.
“Too quick to respect”, not “To quick to respect”.

Great one shot that I would love to see how it would go from here.

this one should be expanded

Your warning was unnecessary, I loved it. Poor Harry - until he can inflict his unwanted adventures on someone else.

Change people back gender-wise, torment his sister, and not have to put up with constantly changing ages. Maybe being MoD isn't so bad.

One Harry, many “Harrys”, or else you need to tell us the answer to the question “many Harry’s what?” since that apostrophe s you have in “many Harry’s” indicates the possessive form of Harry.
“twenty-five” should be hyphenated.

More please? I like this alternate universe already.

Jules..watt...are you punishing us?how re Volt ing