There seems to be words missing and some words used in the wromg places and the story seems to drags on in certain parts but its pretty decent and unique story.

Why would he choose to be the hero? This whole story has had him dreading and wanting nothing else but to not be the hero.

story looks interesting.
it is kind of funny that harry died in a car crash and not james and lilly like the dursleys said.
jack and sally make good parents for harry.
however, i fear you will fall into the cannon trap. this is a whole different world for harry potter. Harry potter in this story is different from cannon, so if you do have him go, please have him get a different wand than in cannon. make it special. and i hope he doesn't go into gryfindor. he is more ravenclaw for this story.
also, when you had the part about the two people arguing about the cat and the rat. i don't see ron and hermione being friends. it was harry that brought them together, and without him, i honestly don't see someone like hermione giving ron the time of day.
also, you tend to be influincing harry a lot to choose to go to the human world instead of staying in halloween town. you have him say he wan'ts to stay and i believe him, but then you have him get the visions and all of a sudden, he wants to be a hero instead of just being harry. all i'm saying is pick a side for him and stick with it.
wouldn't mind longer chapters.

Thanks for updating this fic, it's turned into something quite enjoyable what with how Halloween's royalty has taken Harry into their hearts as their son. Wonder if there'll be an meeting between Harry and his grandparents, Dr. and Jewel Finkelstein. Would Igor be his "uncle"? Blythe is a charming addition to the cast, considering her parentage and quirky nature. Hope to read more of this fic soon.

This is a good fic, I'm enjoying the chapters and interaction with characters and Harry. I'd advise try keeping character names constant, there's the one instance where Gertrude was refered to as "Gretchen". Hope to read more when it's ready and posted, please keep updating this story.

Figures they won't leave him alone even if he is dead.

I bloody love the sword in the stone. On a different, more related note, I also bloody love this story. Can't wait to see where it goes.