| Reviews for Through a Snake's Eyes |
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   Hank1967 chapter 7 . 15h Glad to see Dumbledore telling Harry the truth for once... Enjoyed the Quidditch match. That was very well done! |
| BohemianVoldemort chapter 8 . 11/18/2018 Grammatical correction... Daphne and she were best friends, after all. Think like this... Daphne and I were best friends... vs... Daphne and me were best friends... Otherwise this story is fast paced with no consequences yet to the protagonist and little dialogue, but an entertaining story in a pinch. |
| Guest chapter 6 . 11/14/2018 And on that note, I'm out. This chapter doesn't make sense. Why in the world did you not show us the first time he ever talked to his parents? What was their reaction to everything he told them? Were they angry he went to the Dursley's? Are they made at Dumbledore? The main rule of writing is show, don't tell. You do far too much telling. Your scenes are short, you cut off conversations right in the middle or barely have them at all. You have a good idea and you're actually a good writer you just need to expand your scenes. Show, don't tell |
| XxDragon King DragneelxX chapter 13 . 11/15/2018 Well its not what i wanted to hear in all honesty but fair enough man im happy to hear your pver your funk now and all the best in college |
| Sadhaka chapter 12 . 10/1/2018 End on a cliff hanger. Funny how authors who do that complain about when others do the same. |
| Baphiwens chapter 12 . 11/4/2017 oops, wrong story. |
| Baphiwens chapter 12 . 8/20/2017 Why did u leave this awesome story |
| Dogco94 chapter 12 . 7/30/2017 Love this story, hope you keep,up,with it. |
| Cherde chapter 12 . 5/17/2017 Loving your story so far. Noticed you haven't updated in awhile. Hope you haven't abandoned this, as it's shaping up to be a great story |
| Zamaanrukh Asif Khan chapter 12 . 4/9/2017 Please tell me you aren't going to leave us hanging |
| zeropolis79 chapter 12 . 4/6/2017 Read this through and I love it.. |
| SkippingintheDark89 chapter 12 . 3/25/2017 DON'T LISTEN TO ASTORIA HARRY YOU NOBLE GIT! I NEED MORE! |
| rsiles90 chapter 12 . 3/6/2017 Liked it very much, would appreciate an update though. You have improved your writting with each chapter, and created a well rounded story. A bitchy Astoria is a good Astoria. Keep doing a good work, thanks for sharing! |
| Kluseqq chapter 12 . 2/15/2017 waiting for more:) |
| Xavras chapter 12 . 1/25/2017 So, Astoria's a bitch Who were those Death Eaters who weren't arrested at the Wizengamot? Doesn't make sense that they could mount such a well planned out attack after all those that were present at the graveyard resurrection were arrested... |
