This is seriously unreadable, suppose I should have known from the abysmal title. While the general premise of Krum tagging along on the horcrux hunt is interesting, you have not done it any justice. You rush through plot points and have no idea how to structure a conversation or describe a scene. Your lemons are pathetic and the entire story reeks of dues ex machina. Contrived bullshit to quickly and easily get the characters out of tough situations. I got to this chapter and couldn't take it anymore. Its disappointing since there are not very many Hermione/Krum stories and the ship could do with some fun and interesting ones. This, unfortunately, is not one of them.

I'm in the off season and I have nothing better to do. really Krum?

Wow, stupidity have limits, you crossed it

horrible

Might I recommend a smut guide to help you spice up this over-with-too-fast sex scene?

s/9661958/1/The-Ultimate-Guide-to-Writing-Smut-Fic

Just wandering when the next chapter to this story will come?

This is a fantastic read well done

SO CUTE!

Love it :)

I really like this story and noticed that this story hasn't been updated in almost a year and I was wondering if it was competed. I've also looked at the reviews on this story and while I know you didn't give up writing this story because of them I would just like to let you know that I didn't notice any of the mistakes that the negative people pointed out I loved how you explained the relationship between Sirius and Hermione. If they would have finished reading this story they would have heard the explanation in greater context.

Gave up it started really well then became ubusurd, Keature appearing out of know where, without being asked, then the soul bond, again it didn't fit properly, dorrry what started if as a good story, I can't read anymore.

I like the idea of the story, but it's hard to believe it's set in the UK.
British service people don't keep their guns when they leave the armred forces, or when they are in leave.
They would use MUM not mom.
Hermiones step dad is a professional person, he wouldn't be calling people dude?!
Your main writing is good and descriptive but you could do with a British beta to help it sound more like its set where it should be.

If Hermione is Sirius' daughter why isn't she his air

Your explanation of Sirius being Hermiones dad, needs filling out out, why did they never tell her who she was when she visited Gringotts before, is her MUM her real MUM?

Enjoying the story, but British streets are built on a block system.