I thoroughly enjoyed this. A serious and worrying situation but some lovely touches of humour, and an intriguing plot. And the dialogue and descriptions flowed well, and I am up far too late reading :-p Well done.

Great story! Poor Newkirk.

Yay happy ending

Pants on fire :) poor Newkirk!

What a great story! I love your natural narrative voice, and that you gave us just enough hints to keep us guessing. I very much enjoyed reading this and am looking forward to finding more of your gems. Thank you for sharing!

Impressive story! It was full of humour, layered portrayals of all our favourite characters, and an intriguing plot up to the last minute. I especially enjoyed the moments that Kinch got to shine, (which doesn't happen nearly often enough, in my opinion) showing what a level head and some insight can bring to a tough situation. I loved the line "Langenscheidt told me that you screamed like a girl and ran face-first into the fence." There were a lot of little parts, like Newkirk trying to incite the guards in the tower, that were soooo heartbreaking, but it was perfectly balanced by the strong friendships and how obviously all the heroes care about each other. I loved this story! Thanks for writing it. :-)

I'm really impressed with your characterization of every one of the heroes. I could see LeBeau's face perfectly when Carter started talking about explosives. The scene with Kinch's careful handling of Newkirk's temper is just perfect. Your insight into Kinch's methods of wielding authority in the face of racism is spot on.

This is heartbreaking...

Nice details about the Red Cross packages. It could be irritating to have a break from the main plot, but it's not. The side characters don't come across as flat, (Matthews' careful work over the raisin piles is funny) and the bartering system is clearly communicated, despite how complicated it seems to be. Great job!

Oh no! Please tell me it's not his family! Did they get killed in the bombing? Oh no!

You're definitely good at building tension. Newkirk's reaction to the handcuffs is a little scary, and LeBeau and Kinch also seems to know there's something bigger going on. I'm a bit nervous to find out what's got Newkirk so upset.

It should work? Maybe? Somehow I think it's going to take more effort than that to keep Newkirk inside. If only it was any of the other prisoners, it would be easier. (I love the bit where LeBeau brings out a candle, and Carter still manages to trip.)

I love the dialogue at the end. It's spot on. And good old LeBeau: quick to anger on other's behalf.

Off to an intriguing start. By focusing on all the nighttime sights and sounds of a POW camp, you remind us that even at 'home', these men are technically still in enemy territory. It does a good job of setting up tension, right off the bat. I'm so glad I don't have to wait for the next chapter!

SO GOOD! Man. I could totally see this entire story playing out in my head. Everyone was well written and in character, and I love the little extra bits about Newkirk, Kinch, and LeBeau's past experiences at the Stalag before Hogan came. Keep writing HH stories! Keep up the good work!
God bless! ~UnderHisWings