Loved the chapter. I'm not sure if you're still planning on updating this story but I would love another installment :)

Loved It!

u need to continue this please!

Yes you need to continue. Please. I need to know what happens.

This is really good! It was extremely well written!

I would love to read more! Great job.

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Chapter 1.
watch it buddy I am warning you I am gonna explode I was Shaking like craziest felt it a greatest FULL MOON! that Sccreamed wiuth them, CREUNCH HARDEER SCREAMED THIS ONE YOU COURTED ripppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp! Then were all Dead with me murdered were all of the youth and young destroyed you hold a her that tOOK AWAY THE biggest Bloated bodies that it came the real truest bloodletting then romved more than all of them killed as all of them them then they had all the Werewolves Extinct but murdered the families never recovered from the blow of us found then myself confessed the seer had a Vision they wre attacked But they are here again you Cullens hold a Infected daughter of Fenrir we have new guards all of them each five are dead but are bound to us that too late they never returned then it was all over the four families over dosed the werewolf gene and had passed to their next children they told us to leave for a tribe who too as all of them suddenly never made it I was a Shifter not a Werewolf Alice we too were Attacked they all died from the changes then suddenly the bodies of us with their own but the spirits reincarnated us/them but shattered as Kindred us Galactic Lycans then time had changed the both bloat bodies more as all of it then removed as all of them suddenly the women had children oops my gift made them fertile the Volturi heard of my planetary powers that it came too late La Push was more overcrowding then infected with more as all that more Children but stopped having kids they too blasted freely then it was too late all of the hybrids more than all crashed the very as all of them were women I took ritual action Kail-FLIEE! Sir! she Challenged then it really happened they were Breeders Girls I Challenged it is my right we are not human time to go to Battle mess with me they are so UNDEAD! They are Sushi who is with me US AGAINST RA! That newspapers changed pictures it screamed GALACTIC LYCAN VS VAMPIRES WAR! The Volturi were steamed but in a outrage then they summoned we had them taken cared are no longer exist but us they been resurrected they are at war with our race but we bring you the corpses then they had more Guards then came the ripping soundwave then too late was heard then they extincted as all of them murdering then slain that it came too soon the bodies wre all fur were made into coats all of it that their race were saved by their host not this time Coats Attack Punch it they were possessed Revenge Momma mia you are wrathfuk but cruel but in your way but cursed us and them are bound he was very tall and Muscular then it came too late myself was trained the five exploded then much many more guards all of them were hideous creatures decree me insane but with planet abilities so they with as all of them were under my curse young lady you are dressed very different bodysuit yes are you the Soulkeeper I need the Gatekeeper Yikes she is possessed like Dana Barrett from what Ghostbusters the leaner shifter took one shocking look at me CLANG OW! Rachel Watch it buster nice cosplay robes really that myself was really possessed was a different being suddenly Fear Gozer I am it's Agent that Carlisle had news she is dressed in red that was it myself suddenly released flames rom my hand I suddenly let out this horrible noise hissed really vicious magically bared my fangs Alice you are no match mortal I am FIERCER! She is Invaded by a Spirit oh no Eater of Souls took over her corpse that it came too late Shattering but spluttered both thrashing and writhing you broken all laws Alision Felix take care of her too late killed then with them then gone into all ashes that the gods/goddesses teleported the corpse my voice echoed weirder I Am Gozer a demon for millennia waited for centuries now DIE! Myself was in Battle mode you can't kill me I am unbreakable you pitful souls killed my mortal body with their bodies I can't die myself was a great Actress myself with them were cosplaying that they took as all of bodies fled in fright and horror you look horrible really with the Red eyes that the guard were done then more guards then it really happened ourselves then it made us more stronger than before you are a actress yes make more fan films that it was from the Ghostbusters mixed with the Sailor Scout Transformation music te young Vulcan woman had one annoying problem gossiping then Stacey began to flirt was desirous that Spit what is that Excuse me oh my god who are these Wild Goddess chicks oh! I Hate spiders hey lady watch it my wife forced me to carry our children her scream was heard why you oh no your gift is making them talk WHAT?! Momma mia Strom we are Vampires with powers he is handsome Excuse me he was dressed from a novel was Muscular then a lot of women flirting Gleeeeeeeeeeeep they are really Animal but dancing like Orion women over here shortie we are the masters you the slaves that they preformed the wild Exotica dance in history their newest scent was driving the men Wild but made Commander Strom desirous of their phroesomes was supernatural wore bodysuits turned their skin Green who very more aroused by dancing he enjoyed women oh no Sir can't they are wearing torn clothes to dance Momma mia they are from the Orion homeworld he was caught by his mate.

I think you should continue. This story has a lot of potential

I really like the content of this! I'm curious to see how working on the project goes! I'd also recommend a beta reader - the content is great, but you have some missing punctuation and misspellings that might be remedied by a second pair of eyes. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Oh my goodness! This is a great start to a promising story!:) And I am already loving the twins…I can tell their arguments are gonna make me laugh; Allison and her little brother sound like amazing characters as well:) Keep it up! XD

Great start! :)

I'd like to read more. Some of your sentences are run ons and there are a few misspellings, but the story is pretty good.

You got me interested. I want to know more.

I like this!

Good :)