Throughout this whole story it feels like you do not read over everything you write. From the chapters before with you messing up Nomi's name and called her Naruko to the fact that you're making it seem as if they have been in the academy for awhile. Even when you have plenty of showings that only two days have gone by of them in the academy.

Like first of all they wouldn't/shouldn't have had a sparring match on the first day of the academy. And then having Naruto complain about him learning everything they went over seems pointless. He knew he had studied and read up on a lot of things connected with being a Ninja so he shouldn't be surprised or complaining about learning the stuff again. There are civilian children in the class so they didn't get the slight head start that clan children would get.

Stepping back some you had a part were Naruto found out about the whole clan heir thing being taken away from him. If you're gonna have Minato and Kushina, who naturally wouldn't have even came across the idea of neglecting him, make this decision but then later on have them feel guilty that they forgot about Naruto, then it all doesn't make sense. And then the fact they hear Naruto's name and just like instantly remembered they have a son was dumb as hell.

Also why are the hirashin seals on their clothes? What if they lose their clothes, then what? Would have made much more sense if it was on their actual body like discreetly or not at all. I can understand why on the clothes but again all Naruto has to do is get new clothes.

Now the whole thing about the village hating him is dumb. If you have Minato explained about what happened during the sealing and how the twins are heroes then also by that logic he would have explained that Naruto is a hero as well. Sure a couple would probably think like idiots but the village civilians wouldn't all point hate at him.

Now the thing with the Pokémon, you really need to come up with nicknames for them. The important characters like Naruto's partners and those that train him and his partners personally should have nicknames. Now if they are just a regular run of the mill Pokémon then it is fine to just refer to them by their species name. But those that are important to the story should have a name. The exception for this are obviously the legendaries.

One last thing, the Pokémon moves are done wrong or you need to explain how he is able to use them like that. Quick Attack shouldn't be being used like it is a buff to his overall speed. it is an attack that allows him to move fast to strike. So using it willy nilly like a buff is weird especially when you could just have him use Agility. And then there's the fact you are making overuse his Pokémon abilities when you said he learned a few C rank jutsus already but hasn't even used any of them.

Overall this story could use a reforge hammer slammed down on it. I don't need to read the rest of it to know this. It I good but this problems should be reworked that way everything would make much better sense and flow the way it should.

Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so farDamn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so farDamn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so farDamn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so farDamn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so farDamn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so farDamn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so farDamn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so farDamn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far

You kinda forgot about Kira.

Into tied with a civilian girl named Sakura, which Naruto found either sad for Ino or impressive for Sakura.

*** Sakura had been mentioned multiple times already. And it was even mentioned that Ino surpassed Sakura in actual combat skill due to being motivated by his sisters. Though both girls ended up motivated.

This was Sakura Haruno, a civilian girl and the best friend of Mito and Naruko.

*** Naruko pops up a few times in this chapter instead of Nami.

Also Hinata pokes her index fingers together. Nothing involving her thumbs.

He has no hard feelings toward Naruto, especially after how he saved Hinata and inadvertly his father, but he just couldn't fight the facts.

This actually shouldnt be a thing for him to know.

Hiashi killing the guy and his brother on his own choosing to take his place (for something ridiculous being a clan head and all and practically screaming they're weak and ready to be attacked...) and even if it would be a council decision, how would he know that by killing the enemy Hiashi would be demanded by Kumo to give his life up at all and be expected to do so as well?

I thought Zorua was female?

Uh. Day 1 unlimited (barring maiming and death) sparring when many were just starting basics and unlocking chakra? Wut?

The Inuzuka have broken hair not black.

Im.. still wondering when all those jutsu he learned are going to come into play. Or any of them. Obviously someone should also ask how hes shooting out water without using chakra which the clan heads should notice.

Side note: Why 10 instead of 8?

Yeah this neglect thing doesnt seem to add anything and was done very badly.

Anyway.. why exactly did he not use any jutsu at all?

Also how the heck is it his still fledgling Aura (he is 9) show more power than the Kyuubi of all things?

Now that I think about it, it makes even less sense with him feeling drained so easily fighting those bandits and yet still give off more power than the kyuubi with his Aura.

Kushina on the other hand looked confused for a second. 'Naruto?' she thought before her eyes widened in realization, shock, horror, and finally guilt. 'Oh my god, Naruto! I forgot my own sochi-kun! How could I forget about my only son!? What kind of mother am I?!' She continued this mental thought for a while.

*** This was ridiculously abrupt. Just like that a slight reminder of him and she suddenly "wakes up"?

Hes played with the girls before. They thought of him and how trained he is which means the time they spent with him when removing his heir status.

There was mention of him being ignored when his sisters opinion differed.

For this to get a reaction and of this level is really really badly forced. I'm really not trying to be mean here.

**** Wasnt done reading.

Finished the chapter: So Minato happened to remember and care enough to put his seal on Narutos clothes? The clothes that I'm surprised they remember to buy regularly let alone bother marking from what was described.

Well now those girls were left alone on the middle of a destroyed bandit camp. I'm going to assume Arceus helps them after that interference by Minato.

Im am confused by if that 6 year old is supposed to be pokemon's Cynthia which means she should be younger than him.

Giving it a chance.

But! I've never understood how these neglect stories came to be. With Kushinas first showing that tragic and sad death. Heartbroken and wishing her son the best I dont get how her being like this became a repeatable used bit.

Nor have I come across a single attempt to have it make sense. It just "is" that way. Where he is treated ridiculously by his entire family just because. Including his mother who used to have Kurama in her and should be extra aware of him and the hate after the attack towards him.

Yet to the point that he isnt noticed to be gone for days and at 7 they think about him enough to list him as incompetent of being clan heir and go back to ignoring his existance? Any reasoning should point out if he is incapable which being 7 isnt the time to judge barring mental issues, that it would be from lack of training which should remind them of how little they have had to do with their own child despite not hating him.

I assume they dont hate him as Minato was with Kushina when Kurama was in her and she had him in her. To go so far as to ignore his existance is absurd and I cant see why besides just because.

Its extremely annoying. Especially since I'm fond of her.

Now getting that out if the way I'll continue to read to see what this story is trying to offer.

Update please...

Fuck off.

Why did Minato and Kushina decide to disown Naruto from being the Uzumaki Clan Head anyways!?

He is NOT any stronger from that so called "training". If he can get exhausted and get a beating then he's weak and nothing but.

You going to stop making him a weakling at any point?