Cool concept!

Creepy, down right horrifying. Loved it XD.

Beautiful. XD

This was really great! I absolutely love how Shuu was portrayed. There are a few grammar issues, but nothing so bad that I couldn't understand the story. Good job!

This is great.
There are a couple of grammar mistakes, but none that take away from the story too much.
And I liked the ending ;)

My friend convinced me to play Hatoful Boyfriend, and Dr. Shuu was easily my favorite! I think your story is fantastic. One of the sentences aren't finished, I don't know if that was intentional or not, but it was at the "I already put your beautiful eyeballs in another jar so I-" and then it cuts off. Just wanted to let you know! I really like it though, very creepy, and I especially liked that it was a premonition from Hiyoko. Better get out of that infirmary while you can still move! :D