Who is going to get to Barry and Lisa first?
Great story. Nice attention to detail and the dialogue is intense. I could follow this . I like that it is neither too complicated nor too simplistic.

Wish there was more. Too bad. It really is a great story.

Cool Captain Cold versus The Green Arrow showdown.

I really like what you did with Lewis Snart.

Just found this and oh my god is this great. Lewis Snart and Eobard Thawn working together is perfect. Two sadistic guys who would cross any line. This fight between Len and Oliver is well written. I really hope you continue this story. Will Lisa learn the truth about Barry?

If you're gonna start a stupid suspense story like this you could at least finish it instead of leaving a stupid butt ending like this one.

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Please update this soon

Hi! I know it’s been a few years for this one but it is really good! You’ve got so many characters at play here and I would love to see them all come together! Thawne’s whole plan is so interesting and I love that Lewis is how he’s doing it.

Lewis having his own agenda, and still wanting Len, makes so much sense. And with the others falling apart over Barry’s “death” it’s only right they lash out. Like Arrow with Len. And Barry protecting Lisa is so good!

God I love their dynamic! It’s the best. And Thawne is going to use Henry to keep Barry in line! That makes so much sense!

But I know it’s been a while since you updated. I would love to see this continued though. I hope you have a nice day!

Love it, please update soon, thanks x

Nice! I think this was a good time to go for the flashback. Good context, and it upped the ante for Barry. Can't wait to read on!

I love your characterization of everyone here, particularly Leonard. Loved this chapter. Great cliffhanger to end on too.

Great first chapter! I appreciate when people write characters so much like they are in their source material. You did a fantastic job of that here! :)

So you should definitely come back to this if you can

please update