I could definitely believe them exploding into vigorous, desperate sex as their first time. Really excellent, strongly sensory writing here. Hot and frantic and really well done.

I just watched that episode and then looked up eo fanfics based on it and this is exactly what should've happened!

Well damn... that was... probably one of the hottest things ive read. very well written. Not many Fanfics like that one. You did a great job! Too bad that one is just one chapter. Would have liked to see where it could have gone.
-Nikki-

GOOD LORD IN HEAVEN. This is one of the HOTTEST fics I have ever read. I know it was probably intended to be a one shot but I would love to see what would happen next. Thank you for this! Wow!

Great story thanks

I do Like it! I Like the way Elliot seems out of control and that in a way, Olivia makes it better!

Oh no, no, no. That is NOT put in a box and wrapped up with a nice pretty bow so it can't be the end. A simple smile and he knew it was ok? It is most certainly NOT ok. Her body language screams that. The least you could do is two-shot this bad boy. Other than the aforementioned ranting...good job. ;o)

Ummm all so good! If only those old lockers could talk what stories they could tell

Another enjoyable story, just the way I like it. Bravo!

No no this can't be the end of it, please continue

PLEASE CONTINUE I FREAKING LOVE THIS

please finish

This was awesome!Hot and sooo..dayummm..sexy too!I wish this scenario or at least something close to this had played out between Elliot and you going to continue?I think you should,you did a great job writing you,loved it!EOEOEOEOEOEO..FOREVERRRRRR..

I wish this had been how the episode ended. Very hot. Is there a second part?

Ugh...should've done this instead of hooking up with your ex, Elliot! But then if Liv would've gotten pregnant, the way Kathy did...hmm.

Wow. Aggressive Elliot is hot. Honestly, I can totally see this happening, the two of them losing control like this. I love the cute admission of feelings and the slow build and all that, don't get me wrong, but this seems especially realistic and true to their characters. Elliot can be aggressive and impulsive, especially during season eight and definitely especially during this case, which was a tough one. This story played on that very nicely. The ending is so true to their relationship, too, never really talking it out, always just moving on.
Brilliant.