This was really good
Keep writing!

I really loved this story, I haven't see a good Blackinnon in ages! I started crying by the end though...

Damnit Shane, I couldn't even get through both of them being sorted before I started crying.
REBELS, they both don't follow tradition, fine I ship them now are you happy? *mutters to herself as she continues reading*
And of course, their first kiss is perfect with just that little hint of something other than it just being sweet.
She takes care of him, and so sweetly. DESTROYING MY FEELS.
Smexy time! WOHO. What have they been doing that she can't sit on a broom? *giggles*
Hyppogriff mating with fruit! Favorite insult to a drawing yet! (Says the girl that had a drawing be compared to a frogman, which one was he? Who could tell, all we know for sure is that he had a hat)
He would always have a piece of her on him, that is so sweet. (tattoo)
"I'll never let you fall." of course you had to really kill people with feels in this didn't you?
a baby, and you managed to make the situation light and funny by her line about naming it "Sirius Jr" making the story even more perfect of course.
SHE MOVES IN WITH HER PARENTS! nononononon Shane, she is not supposed to die. Don't be mean, let her live.
*sighs* I know you were going to do it, and yet it still hurts so much. I might never be able to forgive Snape now, even if it isn't cannon that he killed Marlene.
Marlene being an artist creating a Metamorphagus, yeah you really wanted to murder people with feels didn't you?
SHE GOT NYMPHADORA AND SHE HATES THE NAME! Someone needs to smack Tonks and let her know she should love the name above everything else.

alright so now I ship Marlene/Sirius. You and Loki will destroy me with odd ship feels.

Loved this! Bloody brilliant!

Yay, Blackinnon! I need more Blackinnon in my life!

I love the way that you write Sirius’ Sorting, I think you capture it perfectly. I’ve always loved the idea that he wasn’t exactly thrilled to be Sorted into Gryffindor. It’s one thing to talk about branching out from your family on the train, but I like to think that when the reality of being separated from his family really hit him, Sirius isn’t immediately overjoyed. It’s a daunting situation for an eleven-year-old. One small critique, by my math I don’t believe that Bellatrix would still be in school during Sirius’ first year. I believe Andromeda would have been a seventh year, therefore Bellatrix would have already graduated. I know that’s terribly disappointing though, I would have loved to write some Sirius and Bellatrix controversy while they were in Hogwarts together, haha. Oh, but the icing on the cake was creating a parallel between Sirius and Marlene like you did that. So perfect! I love how he is the only one clapping for her Sorting, giving them an instant bond! New headcanon accepted!

Ah yes, I loved that you’ve incorporated the headcanon that Sirius is a smoker. Bonus points for making it seem like Marlene is the bad influence, that’s a very interesting dynamic. But it works so well for Blackinnon, because in order for them to be a serious couple, Marlene has to be able to keep up with Sirius. Really well done there.

I just love the way that you incorporate the abuse that Sirius endured and the way you make Marlene the one to take care of him. Very sweet and all the angst just gets me.

“Well, it looks more like a hippogriff had angry sex with a bowl of fruit, but I think I see it.” Haha, the banter is fantastic! I also love how you addressed the idea of wizards getting tattoos as well. I’ve been playing around with a similar idea for Sirius.

The scene with the motorcycle is just gorgeous. I love the flaw that you introduce that on the surface seems to make no sense. But when you think about it, it makes perfect sense. When Marlene is on a broom, she is in control and feels confident that she won’t fall. On Sirius’ motorcycle, she has to give up that control and trust him. Wow. Such a lovely sentiment when she opens her eyes and decides to trust him.

Uh-oh. Craving food. Stomach bug. You’re not about to do what I think you’re about to do. It would be exciting if I didn’t get the sense that Marlene is going to meet her canon fate. Well, there is a baby. I’m very concerned about what’s going to come of all this though. I know you too well…

And you did it. Right in the feels! You paint a very gruesome picture, and I mean that as a compliment. I’m cringing and grimacing just reading the words. I also like the implication that Snape may have been involved, because that really explains how in the future the two of them are never able to let the past go, despite being on the same side. Oh and then the scene where James saves the baby… so gut wrenching! One thing I wish I would have seen here is more comforting from James and Lily. They come across as a bit clinical, and I just have a hard time imagining them that way.

Oh wow! I just love that twist! The idea that Nymphadora is actually Sirius and Marlene’s daughter is just great! I did not see that coming.

I really love this piece! I think you did a great job of giving us the important snapshots of Sirius and Marlene’s relationship over the years, to the point where it feels like we got the complete picture. Really well done! Definitely one of my favorites!

Firstly, I loved that little note about the McKinnons and Ravenclaw, and the mirroring you set up there right off the bat. I think it's a wonderful little touch.

I must say, that whole first section is full of hauntingly beautiful lines and metaphors, including that line I just mentioned. The tie feeling like a noose, his cousin's eyes..., the harsh leather... it really is wonderfully constructed, nuanced and a real heartfelt representation of Sirius in that moment.

The faithful follower Dog Star metaphor is also amazing and I'm really surprised I haven't come across it before! It seems a really obvious comparison, but until I read it, it never even crossed my mind! I think that's a sign of a damn good metaphor!

I really love how you balanced the happy, light-hearted scenes with the stark, horrific realities of Sirius's life. It makes it all the more provocative.

Oh my God, you cruel man. You gave them a baby, A BABY - a promise of a future and happiness and lovely things and redemption... and rip it away. Just like that. It's like your trying to break me.

That twist at the end though. It's so poetic and heartbreaking that it seems so entirely possible, and there's a real beauty in that. Especially with the artist imagery.

I can't believe it took me so long to get around to reading this one, but it's fabulous. Everything comes together here perfectly and I just loved it. If I was wearing a hat, I would tip it to you, Sir.

I loved how you built up the relationship of Sirius and Marlene. It felt so believable and I loved the chemistry between them. They seem like they have a lot of fun together and are able to tease each other, even while there’s more serious stuff going on.

I liked the description “skinny albinos” to describe the Malfoys XD

I liked the foreshadowing that Nymphadora was really Marlene and Sirius’ daughter. When Marlene first mentioned liking the star I was half expecting Sirius to think of Tonks or mention her somehow. I was also surprised Nymphadora was a star name, I had to go look that up but couldn’t find where the name came from. All the articles just reference the character / It makes sense given how the Black names are all stars but no one has ever pointed out the connection before. It did bug me that the ages don’t line up. Sirius is like 13 years older than Nymphadora so either you aged the Marauders or de-aged Nymphardora so she’s closer to Harry’s age for this to work.

Cheers!

I liked how you showed the gradual build up of their relationship, right from their very first meeting. I think you captured their relationship really well, showing anything from the simple to the defining moments, and it really helped to put across the connection they have.

I was a little confused on timelines for parts of the sections during the war, but I think that’s maybe because I just assumed that he wasn’t working because they were already in hiding due to the prophecy, but I’m pretty sure now that I was wrong about that.

I actually really liked that James wasn’t an Auror (or, at least he didn’t seem to be). I don’t remember it actually saying anywhere in canon that he was an Auror (just a member of the Order), so a different career path is an interesting idea, and not something I’ve ever seen before except in Muggle AUs.

I liked the imagery of Sirius (the star) in-between the skulls teeth, and I think that worked really well in foreshadowing his death in the series, as Bellatrix finally made good on that promise.

I absolutely loved that Tonks was Sirius and Marlene’s daughter, and how the ending (and her name) linked back to that scene so many years ago when they had their first kiss.

OMG this was an amazing story. Sirius and Marlene's relationship from the very beginning. You really feel the impending doom in the first section as Sirius contemplates his mother's reaction to his house placement ('her rages as dark as her name') Very nice. It's also interesting that the McKinnons' have a family tradition as well, though her family won't be as upset as Sirius'
Then it just gets more touching and romantic and real. The way she takes care of him after his bruises from his parents. Their sexual relationship, the motorcycle ride, the baby. And then in the end, Sirius making Andromeda take care of it and naming is Nymphadora after Marlene's favourite star. (Nice explanation for such a strange name. Didn't know it was a star name).
Loved this.

Well there.I think this is one of the most gorgeous stories I have read in awhile. It was haunting, romantic, tragic, and held just enough light to spark some hope. I love the progression of their relationship. Each moment provided such an insight and grew to create something glorious.

This was poignantly beautiful! I know no other to start this review. I liked that it was Sirius/Marlene (came to really like this pairing). I liked the start- how they came to rely on each other because they were the ones who broke their family traditions. I LOVED how you tied it in cannon. The story was well written, as usual, and the descriptions were perfect. Really nice one. (oh, btw, does it mean that Remus becomes Sirius son-in-law? :o )

what a surprising twist there at the end. then my brain stopped and I was like: OMG Remus banged Sirius' daughter!
took me a couple of minutes to get over the OMG factor XD
after that I could focus back on the story.
I really liked it. it's so very emotional, almost had me in tears when she died. you did a wonderful job in bringing all those emotions to play.

...Damn it, this is really painful and really beautiful all at the same time, and I love it. I love how even from the start, Sirius and Marlene have a connection, being Sorted into the "wrong" Houses, although I hate how Sirius's family treats him. I think you painted that very well, what happens while he's at home, and then I love Marlene helping him afterward. The tattoo is great and when she started talking about peanut butter and pickles, I was like...oh no. I was not expecting the baby to be Nymphadora, but I love that she is! I'm glad that there was someone Sirius could leave his daughter with.

This very good not too short or too long. The prompts had to use were used well. I couldn't spot SPaG issues at all so well done.

I enjoyed reading this.

i wish she had called it 'sirius junior' that would have been 't want to favourite this story but I have no choice. Its absolutely beautifully written :)