Wow for your first story it was beautifully written! I enjoyed this story so much had me in tears I was nervous. Thank you for sharing!

Omg my tears wont stop so sad

Breaking my heart

Cute story

You had me sobbing thinking that they both died. It's still sad that Ryu didn't make it though... Amazing fanfic though!

I really loved the story...
Though in the end you gave me a scare...
I hope you right more nalu supernatural au stories...!

Yes, you did good.

I love this chapter.

I know Natsu can make it.

I love this chapter. It's nice to see Lucy comfortable.

Cute chapter.

Interesting chapter. I love Natsu being a powerful alpha and Lucy a lone wolf.

Okay... But HOW is she alive? What REALLY happened that night? That's just too big a question to leave unanswered.

But anyways.

Final review!

Overall, really not a bad premise! And although I definitely feel it could have been executed better, I also saw moments that were promising and I think you have some hidden potential.

I wish only the best for you and hope you continue to learn, grow, and mature as a writer and keep working hard.

Congratulations on your finished story,M. C.

I apologize, I didn't read far enough. That was my error and I admit it.

In this, at least, you were consistent, and not every author would be.

Disregard my previous critique please.

Thank you
M. C.

If they could all hear Lucy crying before when Natsu was unconscious, and they could hear the shouting match when Lucy first arrived, there's no way in HELL that the whole pack wouldn't have heard Lucy screaming and Natsu moaning while consumating their mating.

Continuity.