I liked this one while it lasted, it just feels like you got tired of writing it and wrapped it up too quickly and too conveniently. It feels lime you were setting up a 100k word story, and cut it off at around 35k words, before it had time to fully develop.

Also while your grammar and prose are excellent, it would behoove you to proof read, or to have a beta reader. Little mistakes get distracting if they occur often enough.

That was really great I enjoyed this all the why through and the whole part about the magical pregnancy was a great idea. Hey if they live in a magical world then why couldn't something like that happen. But as in the story as dust said where's the fun in that.

Ok that bit on the magical pregnancy was good didn't expect it didn't see it coming I liked it. But I kinda feel like their was something missing at the end of this chapter like their could have been something extra added to it.

I was wondering if you where going to make a bumblebee fanfix kinda like this one.

That was really good the suspense build up till now was great. I Find it tough to stop reading that's just how good it is. And this sex scene was good. you built it up in all of the right areas. Can't wait to see what's next. Keep up all the good work.

Oh and what would you think of a rwby x hinata naruto yuri cross over just thought that it might make for a good story what do you think.

This is cute so far. Been meaning to read it for ages actually. I'm slightly concerned that there'll be too much emphasis of the physical side of things, but we'll see.

Slowly but surely, I'm going through this story.

That was sickeningly sweet. Ruby's antics at the start was one of the most amusing things I've read from you and it made her realization of Weiss' true motives all the more satisfying. Weiss is a useless lesbian(tm).

I loved the chapter. Gonna keep reading.

Welp, took me long enough but I finally got around to reading this.

I like your interpretation of Weiss and Ruby. There's a certain childlike innocence with Ruby that you capture quite well, making her interactions with Weiss all the more endearing. Then, of course, there's Weiss, who you write as casually prideful and very direct. A little bit different from most of the Weiss I've read who are normally some combination of extremely serious, arrogant, sarcastic, and aloof. The particular combination of traits you've used for your Weiss leaves a good impression.

I remember you staying that one of your friends thinks of your - the word escapes me... sensual? I think that's the word? - they think of your sensual writing as tame and boring. I would agree that it's pretty tame, all things considered, but I cannot for the life of my understand how someone would think that was not titillating in the slightest. That was really friggin' hot.

Welp, it expected to like this and by my words just now it's not like I had a bad time - I had a very good time, in fact. This is definitely worth a full read through.

This is a very good story, I really enjoyed it and it didn't get boring at any point. The only criticism I really have is that out had an odd account of plot for just a fluff fic, not really a problem, but something I'd try to at least balance out. I'll keep it in mind, I'm starting to write a really long Arkos/WhiteRose fic, do anything I can learn from this is good. Anyway, great story, would read again.
-Syntheticate

This was awesome ten out of ten

This story was great.

This was amazing. I wish it wasn't over, but it is, so... Thanks for the ride, smut, and feels.

Well... that was a thing... I'm not really sure what to say other then good job, and I'll keep an eye out for more of your stories.

This was good. A little rushed perhaps. But good.

****ING CLIFFHANGERS!