Hi Potter Jackson 22
I just have a suggestion about your story. As a reader, I would say that the story itself is captivating, but it would be much appreciated if you would include a summary about the prequel (for those who didn't read or forgot it), and have more descriptions. I would also like to see the chapter be longer, since it would be more enjoyable to read it (that is just a personal preference).
I also did find the dialogue to be a bit boring to read, it would be fun it you spiced it up a bit more, and tried not to sound repetitive. For example, you end diagloues with "he said" "Hiro Replied" "Hiro asked" etc.
Again, I would say that this is a good plot line, and an amazing attempt at writing a fan fiction (much better than most), but it would really be even better if more descriptions, details and variations were included. Just remember, the reader can't understand what was going on in your head when you wrote this story. They can only see what you let them see. Sometimes, it might not come across the way you wanted it to.
Another thing is that it can get a little confusing and extremely fanon if you include characters from completely different genres. For example, Ponyboy and Johnny are kids from a completely different world with a different reality. Their characters can get completely destroyed if you try to integrate them into a world completely different to their circumstances, if you are not able to convey the message properly. This is all being said assuming that this is a canon story. If this is a fanon, you can do what you want with your characters.
In the end, I want to say, good luck with writing your story. I simply gave you this advice from previous writing experience I've had. You should know that I don't have any experience writing fan fiction, I've only read it. I have written stories in general, for other assignments. I really think that you could benefit from these suggestions, but the choice is yours. Again, good luck and have fun doing this.

A Writer,

P.S. I would suggest reading other crossover fan fictions such as The Tournament of Power by PercyJacksonAlways, and/or A New World by AG Adrianne. One of these is by an experienced fan fiction author, and the other is by a beginner such as yourself. You can read both and see what it is that you are missing, and try to improve your own skills.

No dummy I meant the demigods getting captured their ADHD would have them notice the losers.

So wouldn't happen.

I'll be waiting for the update then!

Jack, your an idiot. That would change the future and Sirius is going to recognize all of you now. Good job.

*troll smile* A GOD NAMED FRED! *whisper screams* APPLO!

Actually that was what a haiku should be a poem with 5, 7, and then 5 more syllables.

Nico: Solace, don't EVER do that again. EVER!

Cockroach Clusters?

I don't get how they got put back in time... Clockwork, do you have something to do with this?!

Since when does Jason have glasses?

Oh Leo, sweetie~
You never fail to make us laugh uwu-

Oh noez.

RUN PERCE, RUN!
JASON IS AFTER YOU. WEARING YOUR HEELS-
[[I just read the last 7 words and separated them from the rest and I just-]]

PERCE. SINCE WHEN DID YOU HAVE HEELS-

/shot

*Devil smile* Will and Nico sitting in a tree,
K-I-S-S-I-N-G,
First comes love- *receives glare form Nico and Will*
*screams to be irritating* THAN COMES MARRIAGE,
THAN COMES THE BABY IN THE CARRIAGE! *runs and hides for her life*

Ahh...
The Solangelo-

I mean-

The marauders are so nice-

Won't they mess up the future though? o3o

XD